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So I was kinda half dead when I gave you that prompt and was thoroughly surprised to see that you had included the second line too (I hadn't meant for that to be part of the prompt haha.)

In all honesty (and this is a personal preference) I feel chapters that are like 90% dialogue are underrated and chapters like this one reaffirm that for me. There was just enough description throughout to give you a very vague idea of the scene without giving away too much about the person confessing, but the way the focus of the monologue shifted between good memories and bad, between understanding the person from their past and yet still being angry with them made a nice contrast that overall made it feel very human and relatable.

Just goes to show that chapters don't need to be 2000 words to make an impact, I enjoyed it a lot.
 

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