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Talk about an objection to a marriage!

This piece was really well paced and didn't linger too long while still managing to paint a vivid image through your use of details. There were a couple moments where I didn't fully understand what was happening. For example,
"What is this?! I will not stand for this insolence! Get-" a loud bang echoed in the church.
What was the loud bang? I presume they fired a shot to cut off his sentence but I think a small indication to confirm that would do a good service just to prevent any confusion.

I also liked the presentation of characters - Clare, Teresa, and Alexander specifically all had very well-described appearances that laid out a good framework for the imagination. Hopefully, with the cast introduced, we get more backstory and exposure to them in the future!

Overall a very well-written bit of writing that has me intrigued on where the story is going, if you choose to continue it!
 

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