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MoonlitRain014

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1. Alaax is so adorable. 2. You wrote a great chapter.

I really haven't anything negative to say about this chapter. It manages to be adorable, informative about Alaax and Vox's relationship and draws attention to the way Vox works with nature and gathers the necessaries for healing. It is very good at laying out the connection that Vox (and his people) have to nature generally.

I also really enjoyed the details of how he created the salve. It was well written from the crafting perspective and your descriptive powers were definitely at the fore as you laid it all out. It read really smoothly.

There are no major mechanical issues that I can see with your writing. From my perspective everything gels really well and flow nicely. I have no complaints there at all.

I just want to say welcome aboard again and add that we should collab as soon as possible!
 

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