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I've read a few of your previous chapters as well, though I have more thoughts on this one. The previous parts were a good setup chapter, and Kai sure does get into a lot of trouble. Onto this one.

The first part of the chapter can feel repetitive. There are a lot of sentences that starts off in a similar way, such as, He does something of He'd done something. It think it comes from describing too much of Kai's actions.

The second part of the chapter, once Kai found his target, was well done. There was a tense feeling and the description and feelings was vivid. I liked that you reviewed the target monster at the start of the chapter. It really helped. The second reminder when the information actually came into play was nice as well.

The monster is certainly creepy-feeling.
 

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