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Vita Dominus

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As I said in the previous chapter, I appreciate seeing Vita lean more heavily into the machine side. It's not how most demvir work, and not really how most should work, but it helps Vita to stand out as an exception. And again, I feel like it suits his organic-hating nature.

I already like what you do with enchanting, but I also like the little bit of alchemy we get to explore in this chapter, both the theoretical with his plans for the golems and practical with the two echo potions. Vita is very much a being caught up in his own head and this chapter illustrates that perfectly. I also really like the magical globe and the idea that he's the one plugging in all the information, it's not just something that can be found.
 

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