Reviewed Week 349: Tristitia: The Gravereef - Feedback

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For being something to get past writer's block, this was incredible.

The emotion throughout the chapter was fantastic and bittersweet, Tristitia's grief poignant. Her need for the solidity of the pier, leaning on Vigil for comfort, silently sharing her grief with her twin, all of it really spoke to me. The funeral ceremony was breathtaking, both creative and beautiful, not just in its execution but in its symbolism to the people, having death lead to new life.

Tristitia and her family struggling with the potential presence of the naga, and not being united in their reaction to it, perfectly encapsulates the struggle with ending a war when there's so much hurt on both sides.

And then you slip in that surprise at the end and leave with a cliffhanger.

As a standalone chapter, I would already have rated this highly, but knowing it's the beginning of an arc of some kind makes it even more enticing. Get to writing, you bum!
 

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