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I feel like we need a better term for biologicals. I've used it myself, but every time I read it, it feels unnatural. Something to muse on for later.

Like the previous chapter, I appreciate the details you give in describing the setting. It adds just enough life to the location that it feels like a proper setting and not just a blank stage. Looking over the plan, I'd say it's a good idea to incorporate the different organizations, sort of granting them legitimacy by their inclusion in another writer's work. That said, I can see parts of this plan backfiring.

Imagine, for example, that the Black Cats already have someone on the inside in TorBru that can refute the claims, or that TorBru even has them on the payroll. They seem the type to employ assassins when needed.

There's a lot of opportunity for conflict. We'll have to see how things turn out.
 

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