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Well, since no one else is going first, I'll lead off with the criminal organization I created within Lupanar. I don't expect everyone to lore-dump as much as this! As a reminder, the Lupanar District in Terminus is essentially a safe haven from law enforcement, but that doesn't mean it's truly...

Villains and Antagonists in Post Terminus I got to thinking of something, and I thought it might be fun to talk about some of the 'bad guys' in Post Terminus. First off, I'd love to hear what people see as villainous forces in the world, but also give a chance for people to talk a bit about the...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Collab - Week 351: The Hunt, Reprised by swaswj.

As I said in the previous chapter, I appreciate seeing Vita lean more heavily into the machine side. It's not how most demvir work, and not really how most should work, but it helps Vita to stand out as an exception. And again, I feel like it suits his organic-hating nature. I already like what...

(Someone had told me they were going to be reviewing this, and I didn't realize that never happened. Sorry for the long-overdue comments!) I actually really liked this. Vita embodies the more machine side of demvir, which makes perfect sense considering his rejection of all organic beings. In...

For being something to get past writer's block, this was incredible. The emotion throughout the chapter was fantastic and bittersweet, Tristitia's grief poignant. Her need for the solidity of the pier, leaning on Vigil for comfort, silently sharing her grief with her twin, all of it really...

What I think should have been the most momentous part of this chapter -- the reveal of the Outside Ones -- was glossed over shockingly quickly, and they were killed off with such ease that I was expecting there to be a trick or a trap. Unless I missed it somewhere in a previous chapter where...

I have my hesitance to accept something so vicious and grisly as the work of the same beings that have been working via mind-control and staying out of sight, but that could also be explained as them being more impatient or even desperate as investigations draw closer to revealing them in full...

Unless I missed it, it didn't seem like Mille got a copy of that enchanting circle at the end, so he'll have to go on a hunt for some of those (not necessarily in a chapter). Enchanting is always fairly interesting to read and I enjoy how each writer so far has made it their own by doing...

Another meet-n-greet, and this time the disparity between the two feels much more exaggerated -- as it should be with the towering, dangerous Diamantus and the wide-eyed young Mille. She definitely treats Mille like a kid here and compared to her, he is. It was fun to read, although I think she...

Short but I like how the puzzle box is described and it's certainly an interesting find on the inside. I'm very curious to see what the compass is pointing toward and looking forward to seeing what you've come up with. Sorry there isn't a lot more to say here, but I liked it.

First time reading Mille in a proper collab, and his wide-eyed cheerfulness is a nice change of pace. Aeria always intrigues me with how quickly she offers to help people and take them under her wing, despite all she's been through. It's an endearing trait, showing that despite all that's...

First, a quick talk about the spells from your spoiler at the top: spellcasting in PT has gone through a few adjustments since the RP began. Currently, spells are broken into three types (regardless of school): Intrinsic, Focus, and Ritual. For intrinsic spells, you can up-cast them by spending...

The dynamic between Chase and Crib remains fantastic, and the way they play off each other is great. I love the description of the Emerald Jewel and how it's distinct from descriptions of the Ruby Jewel. It's how I would have envisioned it as well. Chase's (your) complaints about speed-walkers...

After the chaos of the past few months, time to come in with another batch of comments. Crib really is a lifesaver for Chase, quieting their anxieties with forcefulness where necessarily. The dedication of an entire chapter to this, just working past the nerves, really speaks to me as someone...

Not really sure what to write about it except to say that this has been good background vibes for writing:

Ok, so more and more signs are pointing to Rosa not actually being dead. I did not expect to see the twins alive, nor did I suspect they were replicarii. This was a long chapter, and although there were some interesting reveals summed up above... the real core of this chapter is the spiraling...

Well, that took a big swerve at the end, didn't it? That's... hm. I'm so divided on how to feel about this. I'm just going to say, firstly, that I don't actually believe Rosa is dead. I feel sympathy for what Micali's going to go through (damn, she can't catch a break), but you spent the better...

As a continuation to my comment on the previous chapter, we really see this obsession eating away at her. Again, it feels less like a thirst for revenge or a desire for justice. Micali is incapable of letting herself be happy, her guilt pushing her to reject the good things in her life. You...

Moon really says it better than I can right now, but the added weight of knowing the rest of the story, the tension building up inside Micali is intense. The thing that stands out, I think, is that it feels like Micali literally cannot allow herself to be happy. It's been a sort of trend in the...