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Even with your previous reply explaining the names, it still took some getting used to. Kept thinking of Tycho as your character and was wondering why he was so out-of-character until Apollo appeared. Surprisingly cocky in this one. Previous chapters had me thinking Apollo was extremely...

You did a great job describing the creature as it burst free, and highlighting the terror for the trio as they start making their escape. Really looking back on it, very little happened during this chase, but it felt like a lot did. The way you described the atmosphere, the near-panic in Kai's...

Fairly short but intriguing, the setup had the right amount of mystery. The dead boar, its wounds, the mysterious fluid, the patch of cloth. It's a lot of things that don't add up, and it creates tension so that we, the readers, are already dreading what that velen is going to do when he shows...

I know this is one I prompted you to do, but out of the very little I gave you to work with, you created something deeply suspenseful and managed to marry together the overarching plot with Micali's personal plot and growth. There's a lot I would like to say but the first thing that comes to...

Well, damn. This is a pretty severe whiplash from the last writing piece I read (not by you two). First of all, I have a deep appreciation for the characterization the two of you are capable of. I've read and been told that a good character should be visually recognizable even in silhouette...

Over the past couple months, I've felt overwhelmed with stuff irl, so reviews are far behind. I'm starting with the kind of one-off pieces and then working up to the arcs (one arc in particular). You guys get to be the first. I would still prefer if you all more regularly read and commented on...

https://postterminus.com/xf/profile/general/Naga_Storm_FINAL_MASTER.mp3 "…my brain, or what was left of it," Gwen rambled on, drawing her bead and loosing the arrow before immediately turning to the little arcs of lightning racing across the water on the rooftop where Amanita deflected it...

In the flash of the next wave of lightning, Micali recognized her error. Teeth and weapons glinting in the lightning strikes, three naga warriors rushed toward her. No children or juveniles, these were full-grown ophidians, towering over the sniper even without considering the long, serpentine...

Caput met Aelflead's eyes without flinching. "He is no monster," he asserted calmly, "but he is a fool. Many have paid dearly for his foolishness, and that will come to account, but that is secondary to what must be done now." After Red's outburst, Keydis had a smile curling at the corner of...

The red wave of ophidians broke upon the rushing forces of the Orca, the line folding in around and rapidly surrounding the brave men and women. Blood spilled freely, shouts lifting up from both sides over the continuous downpour and crashing thunder. It was like the invasion all over again...

Withdrawn, per your request. I will however, offer some notes. Regarding the form, with a vistra, it's required to have some visible element. You can try to conceal it, as Keydis does by wrapping her arms, but there needs to be something where people can see it and recognize "this person is...

This one poses an interesting dilemma. Generally, you're allowed to 'have' more than two EX items, but only carry two on your person at a time... but this would never need to be carried on your person, so you could essentially always have an extra EX item. Might have to add a rule for like "+1...

You asked me to proofread this, but I didn't see any errors that needed correcting. If there were any, they were so minor as to slip by. I can't remember how long it's been since I read the first part of this but it still impresses me now. Being someone who sometimes gets lost in my own...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Convergence of Tides by swaswj.

https://postterminus.com/xf/profile/general/Naga_Storm_FINAL_MASTER.mp3 Convergence of Tides Anguis Trigon, Final Phase The Orca cut through the turquoise waters, quiet save for the hum of its engines. The tension was thick in the confined quarters, the air filled with dread and the...

Huh. Wonder how I missed those? I don't even have the larger versions in my icon folder. I've been pulling icons from here, though, so if there are any non-skill icons you need to reference, you can probably find them easily enough: 3817 free SVG and PNG icons for your games or apps |...

I like this. It's a good way to capitalize on the advantages you already have as a sniper, and the simplicity means that you are effectively always benefiting rather than hoping for an occasion to use it. Approved, with slight rewording of the Effect (just rewording, no buff/nerf) and increased...

Cool stuff. I'll have to see if there's a way to officially incorporate them.

Grace considered Aelflead for a moment before nodding solemnly, deciding that it was a matter to be left alone for the moment. "We shall reconvene in the morning and determine what is the best course of action for the future. We would greatly appreciate your patience," she added, placing a hand...

"It rests with him, true, but if given a full understanding of the situation, I have no doubt he will return them," Garus said. There was a hint of uncertainty in his voice, but he didn't linger on the thought. "It may be a case where we should make the return, make the amends, and then worry...