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Lea’s smile wavered. “Ah,” he said. “No. I guess it isn’t. ...Is it? I don’t know, how common are underwater cities and prisons? I don’t...” he hesitated, plucking at the unraveling threads at the hem of his cloak. “I don’t really remember much, actually. I remember being in the water, alone...

Liaelty - Lea, it would seem, to these people - stared blankly at first. His head was spinning. Princes and princesses, empires and statues, ruins and relics: who were these two, and what were they talking about? It was a bit of a sensory overload for him. He'd gone so long without hearing any...

"...Com...panion…?" the man echoed, his voice soft and wondering. He continued to stare at the duo, drinking in their appearances, for a long moment. "So you're...." he said carefully, "...you're not...?" Then a broad grin split his face, and he scrambled to his feet. "A-and you speak! I mean...

The man, who had the wide-eyed, owlish look of someone who had just forced themselves awake, stared at the new prisoners with blank apprehension writ across his face. He sat tucked up in one corner of the cell, the remains of a bedraggled brown cloak around his bare shoulders and a pair of pants...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [collab] Week 288: Quaere by Inks.

Word Count - [3,984] Quaestor Laermont - [Moon] Voxifer - [Inks] For someone so large and made of a bio-metallic substance, Quaestor Laermont moved very quietly. He was tailing his target cautiously, keeping him in sight while managing not to be seen. The inspector had many years of...

Heya! MM, short commentary because no matter how much I sit here dwelling on it, I just can't think of a lot to say! This was fine. It was a fine chapter. Not a ton happens. I'd say that the little conflict (if you can even call it that) felt a little pressed, a little forced, and over before...

Waaa that description of a sleepy/lethargic day at the beginning makes ME FEEL SO SLEEPY AND LETHARGIC, gosh Ky did you even want feedback for this?? *side-eyes their bed* NNNNNGGG. Okay, fine! FINE! As per usual with most of your writing these days, this reads very well and has a nice...

/points Kyle started it

First off, I just wanna say that you guys collab together exceptionally well. I don't know how long you took on this, but the transition from person-to-person was butter-smooth, and I always really appreciate that in a collab. BOY SHIT SURE HIT THE FAN HERE, HUH BOYS AND GIRLS? Kyle mentioned...

Word count [4,713] Ante et Retro Eloquii jerked awake with the roar of waves and distant pounding of rain in his ears. He thrashed, caught up in the remnants of a dream, and tumbled to the floor in a tangle of limbs and sheets. He threw himself upright, managed to free his head from his...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [Be] Week 265: Ante et Retro by Inks.

“Eugh,” said Red. “...Guess I was asking for that one, though,” she sighed. Nevertheless, she swept her gaze - swiftly, perfunctorily - across the crowd. Her eyes caught and held on the newly-arrived princess, but only for a moment. Great ass; shame about the personality. The Aelflead girl...

Bundled up in a thick, dusty-brown poncho, a thicker, weather-torn cream neck-scarf, and dark long sleeves under her usual yellow vest, a newsboy cap hiding the tips of her ears, Red had still felt like she was going to freeze to death in the frosty morning air as they’d waited to board the...

SORRY KYLE I KNOW I KNOW I'm the biggest shit in the world. Anyway, I was supposed to give some feedback on this, uh...probably like back in 2015 knowing how I am, but here we are now. SO! Since Dys already buttered you guys up with nice words and praise, I am here to be an asshole! Now! I...

you just couldn't help yourself could you COULD YOU It's been a while since I've read some Eos shenanigans, but the chapter is great - as good as any of your writing, that is to say, which is A++. Eos remains endearingly curious, quick-witted, but also prone to childish behaviors enough to...

OKAY SO I AM going to be references and going off my comments from Discord a bit writing this, SO FORGIVE ME. Remind me to bully chat for more feedback >8( SO OVERALL, this chapter was really good throughout. I know a lot of your stuff has gotten longer lately (or...has it? IT FEELS like it...

MENTIONED THIS WHILE I WAS READING IT, but god damn any time you take the time to start developing the world, even (especially) through something as simple and banal as chatting about the most efficient cable route to take to get across Terminus, I EAT THAT SHIT UP. It reads so naturally, so...

Naev is a fuckin' riot, man. I like how you've taken his plot as an opportunity to weave a bunch of people together, all contributing a small part to Naev's Big Plan. It's interesting to see everything sorta slotting together - even if you did show me your sorta rough draft for how it'd all work...

HEY-HO! I TOLD U I WOULD DO IT, AND HERE I AM. Okay, so, I am torn on how I feel about this chapter. On one hand, and as per usual, I love how you write basically anything related to crafting and smithing. All the discussion about obsidian and Naev lookin' for the exact right obsidian with the...