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[8th] Week 287: Reshin Izukawa

Week 287: Reshin Izukawa

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Contact Info: [email protected]

Age: 100 years old ( looks approximately 20 years of age )

Physical Stature: Reshin stands at around six feet even and weighs close to about 185 pounds. He has a lean but muscular body build complete with with compact but powerful looking biceps, triceps, quads, and a slightly visible six pack. He is easily distinguishable from many others from a marking embedded on the left side of his neck written in a language of unknown origin with the meaning being something Reshin prefers to keep to himself about. He also has a lizard tattoo on his left shoulder. He can normally be seen wearing the normal uniform which is no surprise, but occassionally dawns his black sleeveless shirt with black pants and is always carrying his Zanpakuto with him. He positions it horizontally across his lower back. His eyes are a light brown, really more closely hazel, and he has little to no facial hair. His hair is also brown and extends to the upper part of his neck in a more loose fashion. His skin tone is almost a perfect olive shade giving him a sort of gleam and as for the rest of his body its mostly covered in scars sustained from previous encounters he experienced during his life in the world of the living.

Persona: Reshin can be classified as a pretty distant person who normally prefers to be on his own as much as possible and as such he is labeled a loner of sorts yet if need be he can communicate his thoughts on the current situation however this makes him uncomfortable seeing as he rarely speaks too anyone unless under extreme circumstances, receiving orders, relaying messeges, or if he becomes accustomed to a particular person who he views as trustworthy.

Stats:

Reiatsu: 1000
Zanjutsu: 250
Hakuda: 250
Hohou: 250
Kidou: 250

Biography: Reshin when he was still alive was never an out going person neither was he ever one to start a conversation. He never really knew how to interact that well so he was considered socially awkward which during his short life on earth he was criticized for his strange habits, lifestyle, etc. As a result Reshin began to close himself off from the world putting up walls to distance himself from his peers.

The day had came to where Reshin could no longer take the ridicule and verbal abuse so he ended up running off in search of a place where he felt he belonged. In the middle of this Reshin had come across a strange being which at first wasn't visible to him but as he began to draw closer to investigate all he could hear was an ear splitting screech and then a large being with a white mask had appeared in front of him. Human instinct kicking in Reshin began to run as fast as he could constantly being pursued by this being until he could no longer run any further. Collapsing from exhaustion he bashed his skull against the end of a nearby dumpster causing his skull to rupture thus killing him.

Unknown to him when he woke up he suddenly found himself arranged in weird clothing that was unfamiliar to him and when he looked up all he could see was that he was right in the middle of a busy market area. What had happened? As it turned out before the being known as a hollow could devour his soul a shinigami that looked over that area had came sensing the presence of the rampaging hollow and as such proceeded to exterminate it. Immediately afterwards that same shinigami had performed a Konsou sending Reshin's soul to the Rukongai.

Not too long after this had transpired would Reshin learn of his fate from a kind hearted man who actually was the same shinigami that performed the Konsou in the world of the living. Learning of what had happened and paying attention carefully to every word the shinigami said Reshin managed to piece together the situation and this is where his story begins.

Division/Rank: 8th Division, Unseated

Zanpakuto: His Zanpakuto in resemblance looks very much like a standard Ninjuto with the only difference being his zanpakuto is much thicker than a normal sword by about two times but the cutting edge is curved in to provide maximum cutting power. Its also around six inches longer than normal zanpakuto.

Sample Chapter: Feeling a bit shocked at the recent events that had just occured Reshin had to carefully piece together the situation that he had now found himself in. So he had died, almost had his soul devoured, and was miraculously saved by a shinigami, and somehow transported to another world in which his soul would take form in a world where literally millions of others who had passed on had come to experience the same fate as he did.

You could probably imagine for someone like Reshin that this was alot to take in but quite actually it was the contrary. In a world in which he felt that everyone was alike in the sense that their souls now found peace with in the Rukongai free from the troubles of the world of the living. He would soon come to realize he was only half right as far as escaping those same troubles he had in the world of the living because right after he had come to terms with his dilema and had accepted it he suddenly spotted two men brawling over a disagreement regarding a possible theft in which the first man who was significantly smaller than the other was accused of.

" You lying piece of shit! " the larger man yelled as he slammed the smaller man to the ground with brutal force and grabbing him by the collar.

" You know good and damn well you took it now fork it over or I'll kill you right here! " he yelled again as he now began punching the smaller man in the face.

The smaller man unable to somehow restrain the larger man was swiftly overwhelmed by the barrage of blows and the physical strength of his much more imposing combatant. Feeling as if he had to do something Reshin swiftly ran in between them pushing the larger man off. As the larger man stood up and faced him the man was much more muscular than Reshin and had a height advantage at an estimate of six inches, but Reshin was never one to back down from a fight with anyone.

The man charged Reshin trying to bull doze him over in one quick motion, but Reshin being much lighter was much faster than the man and as such was able to out manuever his opponent. The man not having seen that coming smirked and spit at the ground as he charged again swinging with wild punches, but once again Reshin was able to out manuever him by staying just outside of his reach before circling around the man opposite of his strikes. Eventually the man had worn himself down and was becoming visibly tired, but before Reshin could begin his own attack a figure suddenly appeared as if out of no where between them. This figure turned out to be a female shinigami who seemed around the same age as Reshin. A little shocked Reshin spoke up cautiously.

" And who are you? " Reshin asked curious as to who the young woman was.

" I'm a shinigami of the Gotei Thirteen. My name is Kira and you kid have some guts kid and some natural talent," she replied rather energetically.

" Talent? What do you mean by talent," Reshin said confused.

The woman paused a moment before smiling. She had apparently seen Reshin run to the aid of the man who was getting pounded into the ground and was quite impressed with what she saw. Looking back over the man who Reshin had been fighting earlier was now long gone seeing as for one he was frusterated about not being able to harm Reshin and scared by the sudden appearance Kira had made.
Looking back to Reshin again she began to explain what she had meant earlier.

" I saw how you rescued this man here and despite the fact that you had no dealings with him whatsoever you still risked your safety to help him and that takes alot of guts, Not only that but the way you moved when you fought gave me the impression as if you had done this plenty of times," she then stopped for a moment helping the beaten man up as she said these few words that would stick in Reshin's mind.

" If you ask me you should become one of us, " she said as she vanished once again.

Sitting there Reshin thought about what the woman shinigami had said to him. Become one of them? How would he be able to do that? And if he did would he be able to find his place of belonging amongst the Gotei Thirteen? He now had a chance to find out and made up his mind that he would do everything he could to become a shinigami himself regardless of what it took. Remembering back on what the shinigami who had performed the Konsou on him had said as he explained Reshin's initial predicament he remembered that the shinigami had mentioned something about an academy in which the shinigami would train and study until they were assigned to a squad upon graduation. It was then that he experienced a flash back on it.

" So now that I've explained everything to you I assume that you now understand what had happened a little bit better. So do you have any questions for me? " the male shinigami asked.

Reshin had listened carefully to what the man had to say, but yet and still there was something that he didn't seem to grasp regarding how these shinigami are so efficient in their dealings because it seemed as if they had been trained to do this and as he now knew they were apart of a faction meant to exterminate hollows which is how the question arose.

" So how exactly are you guys able to fight the way you do and whats with all these weird abilities you have? " Reshin asked almost skeptically.

The man looked at him for a few seconds and then smiled a little bit. It was almost as if Reshin's questions seemed to bring back memories for this shinigami, but soon the man would snap out of his daze and refocus himself on the question that was brought up.

" Well you see kid us shinigami train for years to develop our skills in whats known as the Shinigami Academy. Its is there where we study amongst our peers learning and perfecting the techniques neccessary for maintaining the peace and harmony between worlds, " the man responded.

" Is that so. Well then say I were to apply would I be able to do the same things you shinigami can do? " Reshin said a little more inquisitive then before, but retaining his solemn facial expression.

" Who knows kid. That really all depends whether or not you have what it takes to take on the rigors of such constant pressure. I'd say if you manage to persist through all of the training excercises and are deemed worthy too move up then you probably could otherwise your doomed to fail. Its something that if your not full heartedly dedicated too then you'll never succeed, " the man said answering Reshin's question with a seriousness that clearly indicated that he was definately not over exaggerating about how hard it was to become a shinigami and apart of the Gotei Thirteen.

Snapping out of his almost dream like daze Reshin looked skyward wondering what the future would bring when he crosses a boundry in which he can never again return to his normal way of life. Despite this Reshin figured if it gave him some place in which he could call home then none of these things would matter because if he was correct then all of that hardwork would eventually pay off.
 
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Hey there, I'll be reviewing your application.

Looking through it, Persona, Biography, Appearance is mostly solid. Appearance sure has a lot of details that make me picture him as being quite well-defined.

Stats, Division and Zanpakutou are good as well.

There are a few issues with the sample chapter, however. The minor stuff first, and that's basically that at the end of dialogue sentences that don't end in a ? (question mark) or ! (exclamation point), if there is a part describing the dialogue immediately afterward, the . (period) is replaced with a , (comma)

" I'm a shinigami of the Gotei 13. My name is Kira and you kid have some guts kid and some natural talent." She replied rather energetically.

This should be

" I'm a shinigami of the Gotei Thirteen. My name is Kira and you kid have some guts kid and some natural talent," she replied rather energetically.

Notice how the she replied part became lower case. That's because it's part of the same sentence. Also, in prose writing, usually numbers are written out as words, not numerals. I changed the Gotei 13 to Gotei Thirteen. If the number is too large, it's alright to leave it as a number.

" If you ask me you should become one of us. " She said as she vanished once again.

" If you ask me you should become one of us, " she said as she vanished once again.

Same thing here, the end of the dialogue is not the end of the sentence, so it gets a comma and the she said is not capitalized.

Even if the dialogue ends in a ? or !, it is still considered the middle of the sentence. So it would be like, "Hey!" he shouted. The he shouted part is still the same sentence and not capitalized.

Not huge issues, but it is something you should keep in mind.

The major thing here is that I've found your chapter was only 797 words. We require at least 1000 words for the sample chapter. While that isn't necessary in the actual RP part, bonuses are only given out if you wrote at least 1000 words, so it's a good habit to get into. Write an extra 203 words.

The chapter was pretty light on Reshin. He only had 2 spoken lines. Perhaps try to show off more of his personality. At the moment, he doesn't feel too distant as he just jumped right into the fight.

Alright, post here when you add more to your sample chapter. Or PM me if you have any questions.
 
Ok so I went back over my writing and filled in the rest of the required piece as you had asked. And I even went back and fixed most of the grammatical errors. Also I seriously appreciate your feedback on my writing and it really means alot to me seeing as I aspire to become a writer of sorts when I graduate.
 
If you want feedback on your writing, this would one of the places you could get it.

As of right now, your writing is still fairly basic but its technically solid. If you want to improve, I would suggest reading other works. You can learn a lot from other people, here included.

Anywho, you app looks good. Please go post in the final drafts thread.
 
Why the cranknuggets do you have 6 posts in the final drafts thread?

Anywho, your application is APPROVED

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