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This is another one I read but didn't comment on. I actually wanted Griff to handle this one since he had reviewed the previous entry and had more context going in.

For myself, I was deeply confused as to what was going on. Still, I applaud the creativity behind the idea and am rather surprised it's something that ended up working. The actual snippet of plot was very small, however. I realize that 1000 words has been established as the 'standard' or default length of a chapter, but sometimes it's difficult to tell a meaningful story (or part of a story) in such a short time-frame. There's no more incentive to push stuff out the door before it's ready. This segment could have been expanded, or more likely, been attached to part 1 or part 3.

Setting aside how brief it is, though, it is attention-grabbing. I look forward to seeing how this all culminates (and as I catch up on reading I've missed, maybe you've already written it).
 

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