[PM] The Counterattack (1250)
So, um, I honestly don’t have a lot I think I can say about your posts here, other than you did a great job setting a scene that let the rest of the CAST, if ya will, take the reins and sorta plotty-chat it up from there. Which is I mean a good thing in this context! I know in HD you guys disliked how plot-raily things usually ended up being, so you’re trying to have the writers more involved in how plot progresses with PT. In some cases the efforts can feel like they’re in vain, but I THINK IT WORKED JUST FINE HERE.
I liked your description of the Big Giga Boat for the Big Daemon Voyage, and L...Laebuta?...I AM TOO LAZY TO OPEN THE THREAD AGAIN TO GRAB HIS NAME SORRY...goatee-demvir’s speech was good without seeming rambling or canned or cheesy. Good work!
[PM] Dark Sunrise (1560)
a-HA it WAS Laebuta. i am so smart look at my smartness
Ahem.
also I SEE YOU WERE HOLDING THE CHEESE FOR THE OPENING OF THIS CHAPTER INSTEAD!
In general, I have no idea what the motherfuckers in this chapter are angling for, but I CAN RECOGNIZE THE LOOK OF VILLAINS WHEN I SEE ‘EM. OR. READ...THEM. Mavros seems like your generic Evil Grandpa, and for some reason reminds me of...whatsisname...that loser wizard from the first Drizzt book who totally thought he was super awesome and powerful and in control. Maybe it’s just the parallel of a demon/daemon lurking at their side, always seeming like THIIIIISSSS close to like, just trying to murder them, but following their commands because ‘fuck it, seems like the easiest way to get what i want in the end lmao’. ANYWHO, I like the setup of the chapter, the ominous juxtaposition of Laebuta worrying over barely surviving the night while Mav and Mal seem to be setting up for what they think will be a MASSACRE of our poor ship friends
UM. NOW I AM OUT OF THINGS TO SAY SO. UH. take full points because your plot stuff is good, it always good, even if I dunno where it’s going since I foolishly didn’t get my folks involved.
Will: [281/281] + 150 Plot Giga Mega Awesome Drama Llama Bonus idkanymoredon’tlookatme
Also like 99.9% sure the grade should be doubled for Plot Mission bonus but um since that isn’t 110%, i will let you do it okay? okay bye
