Reviewed It Comes Down to Loss - Feedback
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Mystydjinn
[Insert rimshot]
I'm not sure why there's apologies being made for the finale being lack luster unless you were talking about the lack of an epic boss battle.
There didn't need to be one.
We just engaged in a major geopolitical moment and one that will change the world of Araevis more profoundly than any of the other previous PMs have. An entire trio of other nations have just become named, characterized, and put in positions to potentially interact with players and certainly interact with other major parts of the world as time continues through the RP. Trade routes will change as the other nations respond to these other major world powers popping up and exerting new influence on the world at large as well.
The military conflict previous to this was engaging if a bit unfocused, but overall was fun to engage in and allowed new players to engage with the world more easily while other other player characters that had become major figures through happenstance were logically kept out of the way without making them irrelevant.
Even if this took a long time (I don't have much frame of reference personally since I haven't been around very long here) to complete, it wasn't much of a slog and tensions remained high throughout every thread with the balancing of major egos, near-psychotic breakdowns, broken hearts, conflicting motives & bad ideas, addled states of mind, and the general mental exhaustion of all the characters involved.
Personally I was more interested in seeing the conflict resolved peacefully because going into this I was excited to see how the world would change with one of the Stricken races becoming less reclusive, introduced with a messier conflict regarding who the "good" and "bad guys" were as well as crime and punishment (thought that theme could have been explored a litttttle more given the context, but things had to wrap up and that's cool).
In this specific piece I noticed no spelling or grammar errors that weren't in character for speakers or otherwise, and no mechanical issues save maybe the fact that this read a little bit rushed.
There didn't need to be one.
We just engaged in a major geopolitical moment and one that will change the world of Araevis more profoundly than any of the other previous PMs have. An entire trio of other nations have just become named, characterized, and put in positions to potentially interact with players and certainly interact with other major parts of the world as time continues through the RP. Trade routes will change as the other nations respond to these other major world powers popping up and exerting new influence on the world at large as well.
The military conflict previous to this was engaging if a bit unfocused, but overall was fun to engage in and allowed new players to engage with the world more easily while other other player characters that had become major figures through happenstance were logically kept out of the way without making them irrelevant.
Even if this took a long time (I don't have much frame of reference personally since I haven't been around very long here) to complete, it wasn't much of a slog and tensions remained high throughout every thread with the balancing of major egos, near-psychotic breakdowns, broken hearts, conflicting motives & bad ideas, addled states of mind, and the general mental exhaustion of all the characters involved.
Personally I was more interested in seeing the conflict resolved peacefully because going into this I was excited to see how the world would change with one of the Stricken races becoming less reclusive, introduced with a messier conflict regarding who the "good" and "bad guys" were as well as crime and punishment (thought that theme could have been explored a litttttle more given the context, but things had to wrap up and that's cool).
In this specific piece I noticed no spelling or grammar errors that weren't in character for speakers or otherwise, and no mechanical issues save maybe the fact that this read a little bit rushed.