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Name: Sasori-ō no keibetsu

Release Command: "Unleash your anger and pierce them with your fury."

Manifestation: A scorpion like human with the body of a man, but possesses multiple scorpion like tails. The outer part of his body having a hard exoskeleton that otherwise is invisible, but becomes more noticable when Reshin becomes angered.

Release Form: When Sasoriza is called the previous form of Reshin's zanpakuto disappears and then emerges again as a part of his own body. A thin but powerful steel like substance covers all of Reshin's upper body from his neck to just below his abdomen. Also ten tails made of the same substance spans out from his entire back in a 2 by 5 formation. The length of each tail is approximately 5 meters, but can't extend or retract although they can move freely in any direction. Each tail obviously are giant versions of a normal scorpions tail.

Ability: Killing Instinct - Each tail contains immense viles of a liquid that causes a similar effect of seki seki rock when injected. When one of these tails strikes the opponent successfully and injects this fluid it acts as a poison that momentarily restricts circulation of spiritual energy. ( One turn for every successful strike ) When doing this 2% of Reshin's own reiatsu is drained to be able to use this ability again.

Ability: Survival Instinct - Any time Reshin finds himself in a situation where his body is under great stress and he himself can't retain consciousness Sasoriza instead of turning back to its original form will act independently in an effort to protect Reshin. This ability can only be used once and cannot be activated unless Reshin's total Reiatsu is dwindled down to at least 5% or below of his overall Reiatsu total in the beginning of the confrontation. Remains active for one turn per one percent of Reiatsu Reshin has left until it dissipates just before the total drops to prevent death.
 
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I like it. But it seems kinda like something you would see in a bankai. The form I mean
 
Yo resh warning: the following is merely my own opinion about the ideas.
I'ma focus on the stuff that matters in terms of submission i.e. form and abilities.

Form seems fine, though the whole 10 tails thing is umm, weird. I dunno i get it but i would think that if you want to go a scorpion theme (which you seem to be hinting at) something like bioluminence would make more sense than a steel scorpion with way too many tails. Though I am glad to see you have a theme that you're aiming for.

Ability one: The way this is worded is that its effectively a silence on any and all reiatsu fueled things for a very small amount of reiatsu and a successful strike. I would probably tweak this to be more specific in how it targets (something like any base techniques are sealed or kai abilities are sealed for the follow round or smth). Over all this seems a little too potent to be even a single ability kai let alone on a multi-slot.

Ability Two: This is unique but i can attest to this you will maybe if you are extremely lucky use this once. Ever. People don't tend to drop that low in reiatsu threshold unless they are going to 0 and the times between 5% and 0% where this will be useful are very slim. This also doesn't really fit with either the metallic, or scorpion sub themes running through this. Maybe a necrolizing poison or something like paralysis of a limb or something along those lines might be a better fit for the use of this slot rather than something definitely unique but with very small use potential.

Overall though, I am impressed this is a lot better than a lot of people do for there first shots (mine was a trainwreck). You have some clear themeing but I think you can tweak it to be even stronger. Overall a great attempt.
 
Sorry if it seems that way, but I wanted to make his shikai more naturally associated to what it represents without going overboard. Plus I wanted to be a little more innovative with the form that it took rather then have it seperate like more common releases. I do see your point though, but when he actually attains bankai then the way its structured will be almost entirely different but following the same design. Almost as a form of evolution if you would owo
 
Name: Sasori-ō no keibetsu サソリ王の軽蔑 ( Scorn of the Scorpion King )

Release Command: "Unleash your anger and pierce them with your fury."

Manifestation: A scorpion like human with the body of a man, but possesses multiple scorpion like tails. The outer part of his body having a hard exoskeleton that from much conflict has many battle scars on it. Sasori-ō no keibetsu himself is a complete spitting image of Reshin personality wise, but is far wiser and has much better control of his own emotions. Sasori-ō no keibetsu acts almost as a form of father figure towards Reshin which is understandable since it being apart of Reshin understands his hardships, and wishes to make things as pleasent as possible. Sasori-ō no keibetsu is fiercely protective of Reshin and is easily upset by anything or anyone hindering his shinigami in any way.

Inner World: An infinitely vast desert of bloody sand in which Sasori-ō no keibetsu normally conceals himself until Reshin enters this world. Upon entry Sasori-ō no keibetsu will raise up from the sand and formally greet Reshin with a random thrust from one of his tails to test Reshin's reaction and mark his progress before speaking.

Release Form: When Sasori-ō no keibetsu is called the previous form of Reshin's zanpakutou disappears and then emerges again as a part of his own body. A thin but powerful steel hard exoskeleton covers all of Reshin's upper body from his neck to just below his abdomen. This covering is completely blood red and protrudes like the exoskeleton of an actual scorpion. The exoskeleton being key in stopping lethal strikes to a majority of vital organs and reducing the damage of blunt force attacks. Also eight tails made of the same steel hard substance spans out from his entire back in four rows of two. The tails themselves which are made of the same substance are also blood red. Despite the strength of the substance itself the material that forms it is actually very light allowing quick maneuverability. The length of each tail is approximately 25 feet long and are about six inches thick, but can't change length or width via extending or retracting, although they can move freely in any direction. Each tail obviously are giant versions of a normal scorpions but are not segmented to allow complete freedom of motion by way of greater flexibility. At the end of each tail is a curved, razor sharp needle point about two and a half feet long, but only a tenth of a millimeter thick so they are hard to see. This released form shares similar characteristics with Sasori-ō no keibetsu's physical manifestation in design.

Special note: Before the needle points on the end of each tail is a slight bulge which contains the viles. This bulge is a sphere shape that is only a foot in circumference from where the tails begin to narrow off as you get closer to the needle points. Also the "stingers" on all eight tails are proportional in size. In this case the stinger is 10% of the tails length while the other 90% is the rest of the tail itself.

Ability: Killing Instinct - Each tail contains immense viles of a liquid that causes a similar effect of seki seki rock when injected. When one of these tails strikes the opponent successfully and injects this fluid it acts as a poison that momentarily restricts circulation of spiritual energy, one round for each successful strike. ( 500 Reiatsu is required to use this ability again. Opponent must release at least 500 reiatsu upon being struck to negate a single strike using this ability. ) Each tail locks on to an opposing spiritual entity mere moments after Reshin can sense it. When Reshin focuses on his target the tails will begin to track the movements of that specific body of spiritual pressure indicated by the direction the needles at the end of each tail points. When the body of spiritual pressure leaves the range in which Reshin can sense spiritual pressure then the tails will automatically unfocus and base its own movement to the movement Reshin can perceive. The number of targets that these tails can lock onto depend on how many spiritual entities such as soul reapers, hollows, quincies, advent humans, etc. are in range of Reshin's senses. Although Reshin can only strike eight at a time.

Special Note: Only locks onto spiritual beings themselves. Doesn't lock onto random objects made of Reiatsu such as the walls, ground, food, sky, other zanpakutous, etc. And again Sasori-ō no keibetsu can only lock onto any being with in the range of Reshin's spiritual perception. Again even when locked on can only strike eight targets at a single time. If no Reiatsu signature is picked up on then each tail will act off of Reshin's ability to track movement and strike at accordingly as Reshin and his zanpakutou alike act off of his instinct to protect him from danger.

Way to Negate It: The effects of the poison can be overrided by releasing an amount of reiatsu greater than or equal too the total reiatsu used when affected by the poison depending on the number of successful strikes. 1=500, 2=1000, 3=1500, 4= 2000, 5=2500 <------ five times is the number of times I can use this ability when attacking with these tails with Reshin's current power level. one successful strike is equal too 500 reiatsu, two successful strikes is 1000, and etc.

Special Note: In regards to its potency the number of times it can be used will increase the stronger Reshin becomes, but the actual statistics of the ability will remain the same. Again as of right now he can only inject you five times before his attacks become normal strikes. And each successful strike will for one round restrict your ability to use reiatsu unless you release more of it than the poison injected to negate it. Also please remember that I have to give up the same amount of reiatsu as this move can possibly drain from you if you override a single strike. You lose more reiatsu than I do ONLY when struck more than once using this ability.

Summary: Basically you either lose the ability to use your reiatsu for a round per successful strike OR you release an equal or greater amount of reiatsu used to strike while implementing this ability to negate it.

Ability: Survival Instinct - Any time Reshin finds himself in a situation where his body is under great stress Sasori-ō no keibetsu will act independently in an effort to protect Reshin by tapping into his own instinct to try and avoid danger. When this occurs the tails will unfocus on any specific targets and will strike upon any movement Reshin is capable of tracking. This ability can only be used once and cannot be activated unless Reshin's total Reiatsu is dwindled down to at least 20% of his overall Reiatsu total in the beginning of the confrontation. Remains active for one round per 4% of Reiatsu Reshin has left until it dissipates just before the total drops to none to prevent death by expending all of Reshin's Reiatsu. ( Basically for four rounds maximum. )

Summary: This is pretty much here just in case Reshin ever happens to end up in a place where he is clearly in over his head. In cases like this Survival Instinct can allow him to stall out and hopefully be able fight another day.

Overall: Sasori-ō no keibetsu is basically a zanpakutou that responds entirely to Reshin's unconscious instinct as well as his senses. The tails of Sasori-ō no keibetsu act upon what Reshin perceives to be a threat to him and independently move to eliminate that threat. When the tails lock on they work based on what Reshin can sense and attack only that specific target. However if another threat is perceived by Reshin then the tails will unfocus and will strike at the very movement of the new targets. This is how Sasori-ō no keibetsu can attack so efficently while defending at the same time via being able to go after one target after locking on or unfocusing to be able to strike multiple targets at once. Also clarification on the exoskeleton, its even harder than steel, but isn't very dense being only four inches thick all around. So it doesn't pack on much weight so Reshin can maneuver normally without being hindered. Its great at deflecting blunt force attacks as well and covers all of Reshin's torso except his head and his arms. It is really useful when it comes to reducing the chance of fatal blows from physical attacks.
 
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So I went more in depth into how it works and its design. I also tried to be more specific and nerfed the absolute shizznittles out of it to make it more realistic for a shikai. So what do you guys think?
 
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Name: Shuryou Onikage 狩猟鬼影 ( Hunting Demon Shadow )

Release Command: "Envelope thine enemy's light of hope, Shuryou Onikage."

Inner World: A world filled with nothing but infinite darkness. Shuryou Onikage is a zanpakutou spirit with no definite form, but can alter itself to take on any form. Shuryou Onikage is also a spirit who is very solemn, like Reshin, but is very wise and will help its shinigami by any means as long as it guides him on the path it believes is best for Reshin. Shuryou Onikage is the only thing Reshin can see in this world, and often appears to Reshin in the form of himself as evidenced from their first encounter after Reshin's slight falling out with Adele.

Released Form: Upon being released darkness will seap from Reshin's zanpakutou and shroud it. Upon the shadows dispersing the blade of his sword will become a pale white with a black insigmia that stands for creator of darkness in kanji on both sides of the blade. The hilt will have a black and white diamond pattern and the blade will extend another foot and the hilt will extend six inches. The guard from its sealed form will no longer be there.

Ability: Kage Sousa 影操作 ( Shadow Manipulation )

The user can create, control, manipulate, materialize and summon darkness produced by Shuryou Onikage. By itself, darkness is mostly used to cloud everything from sight, but by accessing a dimension of dark energy it can be channeled to a variety of effects, both as an absence of light and a solid substance. The user can also create a variety of constructs and weapons via using this ability. The user of this ability must pay 1% of his reiatsu per turn to manipulate existing shadows, and may pay an additional 1% to create up to 5m of shadows where there are none.

Attack: Akutou Nakama Kurayami 悪党仲間暗闇 ( Dark Wolf Pack )

As long as there is at least 5m of shadow nearby, Reshin pays up to an additional 5% reiatsu to take the shadows with Shuryou Onikage and materialize them into a pack of ten wolves. These wolves attack ferociously and do not stop until they have reached their target. Upon making contact with the opponent the wolves will suddenly explode into hail-sized debris made of materialized shadows. The initial detonations hit for 1% of Reshin's reiatsu, potentially up to 10% total. The wolves can move equivalent to the speed of Reshin's hohou stat.

Attack: Eiryuu 影竜 ( Shadow Dragon )

From his own shadow, Reshin pays 5% of his reiatsu to take control with Shuryou Onikage and materialize it into an 8m long serpent-like dragon that attaches itself to any available shadows or darkness around the opponent. After coiling itself around the opponent, it remains there for up to three rounds. As long as it is coiled around the opponent they are unable to use shunpo, or any other high speed hohou techniques. The dragon is guided by Reshin's hohou stat, and in addition can only affect those whose hohou stat is up to 35% higher than his. If the opponents hohou stat exceeds that than they are unaffected.
 
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Reshin, quick thing. No matter what they are, your Shikai can only have a maximum of three techniques. Only Bankai-level releases can have four techniques.

Secondly, your initial kai was much more unique in design and functionality. All you have to do is think of what you would want the poison to do; reduced mobility, crippling pain, kidou lockdown. If you want my general opinion, it would look something like this:

Form: Gives Reshin the scorpion stinger (I would go with around 5 meters for length) and control of the tail as guided by his zanjutsu stat. Pierces through an opponent's skin rather than slashing or cutting like a normal sword might.

Ability: The scorpion shell: passive damage reduction against physical attacks. Minor wounds like grazes, scratches, and shallow cuts would be defended against with impunity. 4% reiatsu (or something like that) drain per turn to increase its effectiveness.

Attack 1: 5% reiatsu for a sudden lunge with the tail. Necrolizing posion that causes the blood in a stabbed area to gather into clumps of bloody sand, preventing ease of use within the affected area. Limbs lose functionality.
 

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