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A lot of my comments on part 1 still hold true. Something I neglected to mention before is that I'm glad to see Valmoor turning up in story. I always approve of seeing new or underutilized areas being fleshed out, no pun intended.
This still has the framework of a third-party story. Curiously, although race is never mentioned in this that I can recall, many moments feel like it's a laicar telling the story rather than the demvir Lurius claims to be. References to aching temples, a skull, and the need for sleep all imply something more biological than mechanical.
The strengths and limitations of the psychic powers are still quite nebulous and uncertain. I'd still like to know if this is leading up to passing down information to those who might need it.
This still has the framework of a third-party story. Curiously, although race is never mentioned in this that I can recall, many moments feel like it's a laicar telling the story rather than the demvir Lurius claims to be. References to aching temples, a skull, and the need for sleep all imply something more biological than mechanical.
The strengths and limitations of the psychic powers are still quite nebulous and uncertain. I'd still like to know if this is leading up to passing down information to those who might need it.