Reviewed Week 484: With Air, Part One - Feedback
- Thread starter Amanita Agaricales
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I want to say that I appreciate the title of the story and I only just got the joke now! I really liked how Amanita was placed in a radically different position than normal. It is fun to see how she reacts to the prisoners and the whole experience of the transport.
I like how they all had a plan and put it into action. My only comment is that some of the dialogue feels abrupt and maybe could be smoothed out a bit. I am now wondering how the story will unfold and plan to find out over the holidays. I always enjoy the fun that you have with your characters.
I like how they all had a plan and put it into action. My only comment is that some of the dialogue feels abrupt and maybe could be smoothed out a bit. I am now wondering how the story will unfold and plan to find out over the holidays. I always enjoy the fun that you have with your characters.