Recent content by MoonlitRain014

If one travels out into the wastes, beyond all of the cities of Araevis, you may stumble upon a vast city, broken and jagged. It lies dead in the midst of a wasteland of spectrally twisted trees and seared ground. A constant wind sighs through the broken shutters of the buildings and howls...

As I write this, I haven’t slept in days. My eyes burn, and a gnawing sense of anxiety grips me. I’m not sure my life will ever be the same after what happened last week. Oh God, I don’t even want to think about it, but people need to know what’s out there and what it wants from the world. I...

Well the plot thickens, doesn't it? I am liking the interactions between all of the characters and the way that the different prisoners respond and act. They are all pretty distinct characters and their personalities are clearly defined. I am enjoying all of the twists and turns too. I am in...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Week 490: Into The Crystal Spire by MoonlitRain014.

The weatherbeaten velen skipper stood at the helm of his steam-powered ship and carefully guided it toward the base of the almost impossibly tall, razor-edged tower that caught the blue ocean’s reflection and the glint of the mid-morning sun. On deck with him, a pale-skinned and slender man...

I want to say that I appreciate the title of the story and I only just got the joke now! I really liked how Amanita was placed in a radically different position than normal. It is fun to see how she reacts to the prisoners and the whole experience of the transport. I like how they all had a...

As you know, I enjoy all sorts of intrigues and hidden plots, so I thoroughly enjoyed the read here. I am going to try to take lessons from how you unfolded that story and worked through the angles of the investigation. It was well-done! I also enjoy the ease and economy of your action writing...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Week 427: Digging For Death - A Quaestor Laermont Investigation - Final Part by MoonlitRain014.

Calvinia had rarely seen Laermont this furious. Even without any visible facial features, he gave off a powerful aura of anger. He fairly glowered from his eye plates as they sat together in his office. “Not only did the bastards get the tablet back, but they prevented us from bringing a...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Week 417: Digging For Death - A Quaestor Laermont Investigation - Part III by MoonlitRain014.

In the darkened hallway of the mouldering building, Yttrius moved on silent feet. Suspicious eyes watched him pass, but quickly flickered away when he swept his cloak aside to reveal a blade. The enlil moved with purpose, his black feathers given a sickly green sheen by the light. After pausing...

Here are my two cents on the story, Fin. It is definitely a stronger story overall than your first one here on PT. I enjoyed that one too, but it's clear this is the one for which you had passion. I could feel you were more invested in your characters and there was genuine emotion between...

First off, I want to say that I enjoyed the way that you set up the story, Fin. Having the exchange between Maclos and the janitor worked nicely as a storytelling medium. It engages the reader quickly and draws them into the story. I also do enjoy the overall “storytelling” feel of how things...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Week 394: A Bargain by MoonlitRain014.

Diamantus gave the detective a flinty stare as he laid out his inducement plan for their TorBru captive. “Between me n’ Aeria I figure we c’n probably convince Caput that it’s worth the investment. Kinda funny how they exiled me and now I’m savin’ their ass. They owe me one and I plan ta rub it...