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I know it was quite a short chapter, but it did exactly what it had to do. I liked the segmentation of the chapter, the split between description of Ignis' injuries (I know they were done in more detail in the previous chapters so they didn't need quite as much in this one) and the discovery...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [Aq] Week 275: Lachtara II by Valero.

The pale velen's gaze lingers on Dante for just a moment before trailing back to the Princess. The arch of his eyes shows puzzlement on a disappointed expression. "Forgive his behaviour," Deni says softly. "Some people don't understand how to treat royalty." With Dante out of the picture, the...

Deni maintains his smirk as Princess Venus scratches at his arm. Internally though, he sighs. Did the kinner honestly not see a fantastic opportunity when one arose? Gaining the favour of royalty was something that nobles bowed and sweated over for years. For people like them to be given a...

ooOOooh SpIcY I really loved how the characters came together in the first half of this chapter. I didn't know any of them but by the end of their interactions I felt like I did. The banter was great. Then the second half just... owch. Watching each of them fighting to the end and slowly...

So I was kinda half dead when I gave you that prompt and was thoroughly surprised to see that you had included the second line too (I hadn't meant for that to be part of the prompt haha.) In all honesty (and this is a personal preference) I feel chapters that are like 90% dialogue are...

VALERO WANTS TO KNOW YOUR LOCATION But in all seriousness, yessss. I've been waiting for this. I love the authentic awkwardness that Dante and Aeria feel around each other, deflecting their feelings with humour or small talk or plainly just talking fast so that there's no time for the mood to...

“That’s no way to treat a lady,” echoed Deni’s voice from further down the corridor. He had arrived just in time to hear Dante’s objection. Upon the sight of them both, the proud velen strode towards Princess Venus with his back straight and his head high. “Are you forgetting who you address...

When Dante got jabbed by Aeria, Deni wore an amused smirk. His apology was like a husband who had been in trouble with his wife. When the older man reacted, however, Deni cast his blue eyes at him. He was contemplating words with him to calm his ire, to explain how the athlete knew nothing of...

Once Ignis took the glass he offered, Deni sipped from his own. A beautifully sweet red with an undertone of cherries. A sort of vintage reserved for grand parties and likely a commodity that was not in short supply around Pelagian royalty. His blue eyes glanced around the room from the corner...

At Dante’s interception, Deni had passed a wry smirk. Any further words exchanged between the three of them had been lost to the velen as soon as he laid eyes upon Ignis. The pair of them had played dress-up from time to time, going to fancy restaurants and even pretending to be someone else...

After silently observing the ceremonial welcome by the Princess of Pelagia - the nuwr Princess! - Deni strode onto the ship as if it were his birthright. The purple cloak that was draped across his right shoulder cascaded down the side of the long-sleeved teal shirt that was buttoned up to his...

Deni would go for Going to the Emperor and potentially Sabotage.

I'm gonna explain my votes here: 1) Anguis Trigon - This gets my best vote because I want to see more of Pelagia and the Pelagian people fleshed out and I'd be down with that. Also Deni would go absolutely mad over his home under attack. 2) Restructure of Ignominy - This gets my second vote...

Haud Ignota Loquor Is He Lying (Again?) Pt II [2,686] Deni wiped the sweat from his brow with one forearm. Despite the Hiemis weather turning for the worst, the air becoming crisper, wind sharper, frost lurking just beyond the horizon, the heat in his makeshift workshop was quite intense. He...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [Aq] Week 242: HILA IHLA Pt II by Valero.

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Haud Ignota Loquor Is He Lying (Again?) Pt I [Wordcount: 2,616] The faint moonlight barely seeped through the windows into the small flat. The only noticeable glints were reflected from a small desk in the center of the room. The first came from a short glass filled with an amber liquid...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [Aq] Week 233: Ísvaskur Preparations by Valero.

Ísvaskur Preparations [Wordcount: 1,356] The short, robust laicar waddled about his shop with a clipboard in his hand. It wasn’t the largest shop in the Ruby Jewel, but it certainly had its regulars. The shop windows gave little away, since a lot of the goods were rare items and it wouldn’t be...