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Chapter 3, Part 2 Wordcount, 1005 "Aha! This will be your final battle! You will never defeat the Indomitable Adamas!" The heroic Adamas pointed his sword at his sworn enemy, Belad the Conqueror. "Pitiful! Your Knights are nothing to my Eredhell Assassins!" Belad retorted, pointing his sword...

Chapter 03: Embrace Part 1 Wordcount, 1406 Kade hit the water gracelessly and the sudden shock of cold brought his awareness back into focus. He almost wished it hadn't. Everything was cold and dark. The waves rolling by overhead sent his body tumbling, even under the water. Each and every...

(I need to look into re-creating the process that would auto-create feedback threads) Well, faex. ... It's really good to see both of you writing again. I didn't realize how much I missed these characters. It's stunning to see how much both of them have changed from the earliest chapters...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for Week 604: The Flames of What We Once Were (Fated Alliance) by Deni Perfide and Ignis of Animi.

Still not happy with the next Keydis chapter. Next week, I post it whether I'm satisfied or not, otherwise I'll get stuck forever again. Instead, we have another look at how Kade's mind works. I should recompile this using the 'chapters' function later, too. Chapter 2, Part 2 Wordcount, 3408...

I actually do have the next part of Keydis' story halfway written, but I would rather not split that one in half. As such, you get another snippet from Firmament. I think it came out more exposition-heavy than I would have liked, definitely need to fix that up later. Chapter 02: The Raven Comes...

I definitely need to spend a little more effort introducing the island. At this point I'm still just sort of slapping ideas together to see what sticks. Ironically, I think I've spent the most time developing my concept of a magical system and the past several centuries of history that formed...

Testing a new Add-on for linking threads as Chapters. First, create a new thread. Preferred to do so in the Compiled Works forum, but it's active everywhere. In the upper right, you should see a new button for "Manage Chapters" where you can add a Thread or a Post and give it a title. You can...

This is an excerpt from a novel I've been working on, still in a very rough state. I normally wouldn't consider this ready to share, but I set a goal of posting at least 1000 words per week, and I don't know if I'll be able to push past my current slump before tonight. It's completely unrelated...

Hey everyone, I'm posting this mainly for my own benefit, in an attempt to hold myself accountable. It's difficult to describe, but I feel like the past year, year-and-a-half, I've almost been in the writing equivalent of physical therapy. It's been small steps, but I had to start with...

"Everybody is a book of blood; wherever we’re opened, we’re red." - Clive Barker, “Books of Blood: Volumes One to Three” In writing, we share part of ourselves with the readers, impart the emotions hidden deep within. Emotions and fears. We all of us hold fear and horror inside, the terror of a...

The imagery of a puppet was woven into this chapter masterfully. One thing I think would improve it, though, is to not state it openly. The visual impact of Mercuti being lax and then coming to attention, together with the Outside One in the background, does enough to sell the idea without...

Although this comes really late in the story, I appreciate getting this humanizing moment with the Seven Devils. In a way, it's more poetic this way, like sating some of the rage inside her is what allowed these memories of a brighter time slip in. Very nicely done both in tone and imagery...

Very dark, very intense. After all Micali has been through, I feel like her choices make perfect sense here. Even killing Corruma feels deserved because even though she knew everything that had happened, she still tried to talk Micali out of killing Cid. Not because it would benefit Micali or...

Six months down the line, and finally I catch up to this. Because of the long gap, I wanted to refresh my memory on some of the details by reading the previous chapters. It's good to get back into Micali's story. A very emotionally damaging story, of course. This chapter was all about the inner...

Converting Google Drive Formats (.gdoc, .gsheet) to Office Formats (.docx, .xlsx) As the title says. Many of us got in the habit of using Google Docs for the ease of collaboration, and have years' worth of content sitting on GDrive. Google does offer an option to download everything (Google...

I'm not sure if I read this out of order (I did the collabs first), but I have to say again that your portrayal of Lea's trauma is quite visceral. I may not have had that same degree of it, but it's relatable in a way that makes it uncomfortable. His distrust of others and the friendly mask...

Before I had a chance to post these, this popped up. I'd say it's good timing, since it allows me to go into the story with my previous critique in mind. I'm going to use one of your early descriptions as an example. This, I would say, is about halfway there, but it still reads like you're...

Two 20k stories barely a month apart. As someone who has barely written a tenth of that recently, take my thoughts with a grain of salt! This is more what I expect from you: the unexpected. This whole scenario had the vibe of Cthulhu Mythos style mystery and horror. There was a sprinkling of...

This really didn't grab me. Blame it on me holding you on a pedestal, but I typically expect really unique, quirky ideas or new takes on classic themes. However, while there was one twist near the end, it didn't feel like it was set up appropriately for a strong payoff. It also felt like... you...