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From Ashes 2303 words To her own surprise, Ignis woke up. She had been so certain she died. That the draconic hellfire the enlil failed to cure herself of consumed her. Contrary to experience and expectations, her eyes opened. Was this the afterlife? The familiar sight of budding voroflammae...

A Fiery Predicament 392 words A series of increasingly bold and reckless decisions lead an enlil engineer from joining a rebellion (or terrorist group, depending on who is asked) to helping save Terminus from a demonic invasion. The latter came at great cost when she was caught in the blast...

I've played Valheim myself (both single and multi-player) a bit and your description is spot on. I think some of the more monotonous resource gathering can be mitigated by playing with others. You can take whatever is in your inventory with you when you return to your solo world! It's pretty...

I think the best way to describe the fight between Keydis and Eloquii is heart wrenching. The sword fight in particular was excellent; I found myself sucked into a mental movie of sorts. My heart was racing and I was on edge because I wasn't sure if El would either yeet himself off the cliff or...

I read this a while ago, but it was still enjoyable the second time around. I like how Keydis is still rough around the edges even when she's thinking about or talking to the person she loves. Despite the wording, you do a good job of getting across the idea that to Keydis, her relationship with...

I could revive my dead Twitter account and follow it and retweet stuff. I have to be careful w/ Twitter cause it makes me pretty ragey sometimes lol. I'd be willing to cross-post on Reddit or FFnet. I'd probably start with older material and make my way through it before doing new content since...

This collab made me... prickly. That's a good thing, though. It comes from the strong characterization of Vox and Laermont. I like how you two maintained the tension between your characters without going hostile. The hints of annoyance, the careful verbal probing, and the game structure all made...

I have to say, I enjoy this chapter quite a bit. The interactions between Deni and the demon are entertaining and you walk a fine line of showing what happened without becoming explicit. Enough detail to be satisfying but not so much that it has to be put into the NSFW section. I also like how...

In that case Emperor for Ignis

Ignis would be in Going to the Emperor and Joining Main Forces Harper may show up for Sabatoge

Hey Guys! Here with some commentary on the thread. First things first, I really enjoyed how you set the scene, Arun. The description of the setting and the characters were enough to give a clear mental picture without being overwhelming. It's definitely kind of creepy, which was most likely...

Well hullo! This was an enjoyable read, it's nice to see another potential couple forming. I like how their interactions were more about establishing companionship than the mushy-gushy stuff. Their bantering and Aeria's hovering between being shy and sassy kept the thread entertaining. There...

I'm late to the party, but I did just want to say a job well done. Will and Fin have more or less discussed the main points. I do enjoy the feel of some old tale that might be told to spook people. I imagine the story being told among the religious and the magic users in Aeravis.

I enjoyed this chapter quite a bit. It was nice to see Parker get a cameo; I haven't written him in so long, but you stayed true to what I remember about him. It's very in character for him to keep people from getting themselves into big trouble. He's a peacemaker, that way. Keydis' struggles...

Hey Hare. When I started to read this, I realized there was a lot more to it than can fit in one chapter. Luckily, I was able to read the one before to get some context because it was helpfully linked to this. I like Ioannes' characterization quite a bit. He's scared, and for good reason, but is...

Hey, Mwn This will be short commentary, as Hare beat me to it. I also enjoyed this chapter, but I did feel as though something were missing. I found myself wondering what Notius and Aeria look like. I'm a fan of occasional descriptors being sprinkled into a chapter to help remind readers of...

Please post any comments, critique, and other feedback here for [Be] Week 228: A Home Away From Home by Dysney.

A Home Away From Home 1360 Follows Crashing Waves A month in Aridus passed more quickly than Lottie had anticipated. She had followed Gavio of the Cedar Circle to his sister-in-law’s residence. The man’s kin were just as warm as the enlil she had met on the Way Finder, accepting Lottie into...

I enjoyed this chapter. Naevius is an off-putting character and I like it. Neither you nor Berri ever say he's off putting, but everyone except Keydis is uncomfortable with his demeanor and even she isn't immune to his oddness. That aside, the switch to orange for Naevis, Keydis and Nyct was a...

User name: Dysney Title: Crow Street The park at the end of Crow Street served as a meeting place for teenagers playing hooky during the day. The peeling paint and rusted equipment fit the pessimistic aesthetic of angsty children in their mid teens; they leaned against the frame of the battered...