Roma: Approved wif buffs. For Hellfire the increase in effectiveness equals the increase cost. so 1.5x effectiveness and 2x effectiveness respectively. Ability two loses the 5% upkeep and lasts 5 turns per payment.
Bishop: Denied. Ability one needs to split itself into two separate debuffs or lose a debuff, in addition pick a stat to base the debuff on. Ability two is ok, other than anything that you do that breaks the dreamscape should also break the illusion. And ability 3 has a 1 image per turn restriction.
Manifestation: Genzai no kimei takes the form of a bespectacled teenage girl. She has a semi-pale skin and a slim build. She wears a red, black, and blue kimono which are adorned with small white boxes. She’s often very quiet unless in serious situations or if she is talked to. She is also prone to sudden mood-swings.
Inner World: Rei’s inner world takes shape as a stone castle. The castle is small on the outside, but incredibly large on the inside. The insides of the castle are completely empty until something is needed.
Form: When Rei holds the sword and sheathe in his hand and says the release phrase, the dull sound of a bell emanates from the sword and it is swallowed by a myriad of colors. A second later, the sword takes the form of a 39 1/2 inch shirasaya sword and two flexible metal gloves. The sheath of the sword, unlike most sheathes, is actually like the blade and is sharp as one as well. Because Rei holds onto the sheath in battle to fight with, the metal gloves are necessary. The sheathe is about an 1mm thick with 3 holes in the along it. The actual blade of the sword is 1/2 mm thick and isn’t used to fight with. It is a piercing red color that contrasts with the completely white and purple sheathe.
Ability 1: Rei has the power to create boxes. These boxes are 3 meters in length and width. It costs 1% of his reiatsu to create a set of boxes. One box is near him while the other box can appear wherever he wishes maxing at 20 meters. The boxes are flat, but can become 3-dimensional cubes at will and can be moved to where he designates whether on ground or air. When Rei sticks his sword in one box, it comes out of another end. Then, the box vanishes. The boxes range is The boxes can also bestow certain effects on the sword depending on what color it is. At first, he can only create a single box target, but for each 2000 connection he has, he can create more target areas at a time, capping at 5.
Ability 2: Rei can change the sword depending on the color of the box. Depending on the color Rei has to add an additional cost to the box creation.
Black - This is its normal color and needs no cost.
Blue - 1% of his reiatsu. This changes the sword into a swift barrage of smaller swords. This does 5% of his zanjutsu stat.
Orange - 3% of his reiatsu. The sword is transformed into a homing drill. The drill homes in on the target and does damage equal to 10% of his zanjutsu stat. This is done over three turns and each turn the damage is halfed.
Purple - 5% of his reiatsu. The swords length and height are increased by 5 meters and its width by 1/2 meter. Its strength is that of 15% of his zanjutsu stat.
The strength of the attacks are applied after the penalties are set. Keep in mind he still has use of his sword after the effects take place.
Ability 3: Rei can create a box from anywhere on his body. The boxes are white and are can go up to 3 meters in width and length and are exactly 1 meter in depth. It costs 50 reiatsu to create a box and for every extra 50 reiatsu he spends he can increase the depth by an extra meter capping at 10 meters. The speed at which he can create them is based on his kidou stat. The boxes he creates are completely stationary from where he creates them. The boxes cannot be moved in any way but they can be destroyed fairly easily.
Special Note: Unless you spend a spec point to change the idea, staff is requiring you to flesh out and develop this concept to a appropriate level.
The premise for this kai isn't too bad, actually. Your implementation is questionable, however.
Point 1: HD no longer uses damage by stat. Back in the Isshen days we did x% of our stat with things, but no more. To encourage better writing and role playing, wounds are wounds, and the kai staff have generally broken them down into minor(a small cut, burn, bruised bone) moderate (a broken bone, a tendon-severing blow, etc), major (amputation level damage), leathal (you die, either now or very soon). So ability 2 would not do x% of your zanj.
Point 2: Stop trying to pull one over on us. Example:
Orange - 3% of his reiatsu. The sword is transformed into a homing drill. The drill homes in on the target and does damage equal to 10% of his zanjutsu stat. This is done over three turns and each turn the damage is halfed.
What this really says is it does 5% each turn, for a total of 15%. You're trying to be sneaky about it, and its not cool. Attempting to 'dupe' staff doesn't get you anywhere. Ever.
Point 3: Staff will never approve things that are called shots or ultimate defense type abilities on a kai. Ever. Kai, feats, items, div techs all need to be balanced so they are *FUN* to play with, and against. Not as a means of making a PC OP. Ability 3 is one of those perfect defense examples. Ok, so things go right through boxes, it has no stat tied to it so if its not an very big attack or an AoE you just don't take damage from it. For 50 rei. No.
Shikai for my new character Cameron Wolf. No spec point used as this is a complete reroll.
Vaikus Silence || Inner World||
Deep within Cameron there is an austere world of blinding light. Sound is foreign there, as it is something he has never known or cannot remember. In that world it is as if he simply hangs amid the light; seeing only the white radiance and nothing else.
||Manifestation||
In his inner world of light, Cameron has seen nothing but the mute and utterly still whiteness. He knows not what form his Zanpaktou Vaikus might take, if it has one at all. Over time he has come to believe that the white radiance is his sword's form: an nebulous entity of silence and stillness yet, somehow, distinctly female.
||Shikai|| Kurdistama, Vaikus. Deafen, Silence.
Vaikus has no concrete form upon release, instead the sword's spirit expands, surrounding Cameron 10 meters in any direction. Within this area, Vailkus' rule is absolute. Within her area of complete silence and tranquility Reiryoku may not exist. Any standing within her domain are as ignorant of spiritual power as they had been in life; unable to call upon it or manipulate it; preventing all reiatsu-using abilities aside from itself.
Maintaining Vaikus' presence in the material world is draining to Cameron, taking away 2% of his total (not current) reiatsu per turn following release as well as an additional 2% per person standing within the range of the kai.
Note: This is all worded in a very grandiose way..talk to me if you want me to reword.
1 Spec point used from "Chasing Shadows" summer 2011 PM's to resub Kai
New Kai:
Info:
Tod’s spirit has recovered to the point where it can come together again. It’s much more powerful since Widow Maker and Mist Fox were but fragments sent to guard and deal with the trauma of hurting Tod. The new spirit’s voice and touch is as cold as death.
Manifestation:
The combined spirit is called Grey Man, it is a humanoid creature with pale skin and a ratty black cloak covers the spirit’s entire body. The only part that he can see on the creature are its hands and from its chin to its upper lip on its face. All of the flesh is shows is a pale, almost deathly, white. The lips are a pale pink color, as if they barely remember they held warmth and color at one point. It’s always dripping blood from it’s fingers and it’s feet leave bloody footprints.
Whenever it does show it’s face it can choose a face of anyone that the soul reaper has seen. Usually though the spirit chooses Tod’s own face. The scar at the boy’s neck is always bleeding on the spirits neck and it usually keeps that mark no matter what face it wears. When it changes faces it lowers the hood of its robe back over it's face for a moment before taking it back off with a new face.
Inner World:
Tod’s inner world shifted the moment his two spirits combined. No longer is simply a swamp with a tree in the middle. Instead there is a house made in the old log cabin style as well as the tree that was Widow Maker protruding from the center of the house. The swamp itself has frozen over, creating loud crunches every time someone walks upon the grass and the part north of the house out the great window in the cabin is a cliff that seems unending.
Spirit Name: Haiiro no Hito (Grey Man, 灰色の人)
Release Command:
Show them the chill of death, Grey Man
Shikai Release Form:
The release is still the same katana with a few small differences. There’s a two inch length difference, it is a little longer than an ordinary katana, giving it a deceptive reach since the length difference is only see-able in close proximity. The blade turns white as snow and the hilt changes into that of a snowflake, the snowflake's design is different every time he releases. The handle of his katana changes from the checkered pattern to a pure black the color of frostbite.
When he releases his shikai the area within fifteen feet of the sword becomes noticeably colder, causing some to shiver the moment they feel the chill.
Shikai Abilities:
Mahi Suru Shimo (Numbing Frost, 麻痺する霜): Tod can cause it to be so cold that people that he cuts with his blade find it hard to fight back. He chooses one of his stats and pays 10% of the stat to lower the same stats of anyone he cuts with his blade for three(3) turns. Every three(3) turns he can choose a new stat and pay the cost to continue or change which stat he lowers. At every 5000 Connection he can increase the turns that affect the opponent by one(1) turn, maxing out at seven(7) turns. The target of this ability loses however much to one stat for how much Tod pays. Tod can only choose to use either Numbing Frost or Mind Numbing frost per cut. He can’t choose both abilities for one cut.
Tsumaranai Shimo (Mind Numbing Frost, つまらない霜): Tod can cause it to be so cold that people that he cuts with his blade find it hard to think. Every three(3) turns Tod can pay 5% of his reiatsu to make it more difficult for an opponent from using techs or spells for two(2) turns. The opponent must spend extra rei to use their spells or techs equal to whatever cost Tod payed. Every 2500 Connection he can increase the turns this ability affects by one(1) turn for an additional 2%. Maxing out at seven(7) turns and 15%. Tod can only choose to use either Mind Numbing Frost or Numbing frost per cut. He can’t choose both abilities for one cut.
After much discussion and back and forth, we ended up with a no on this one. You can either attempt to come up with a new idea for the kai or attempt an appeal of the decision. The main issues we were examining is the strength of this release versus people without any sort of brawling capabilities, and tough questions like what about projectiles and so on.
Blind - No decision
We won't review your kai until your character is reapplied and approved. Once that's confirmed, feel free to talk to us, or post again and we'll review it.
I appreciate the helps you all have given me...I just realized that I really don't want to spend a spec point...so I tried to fix my present idea
Name: Genzai no kimei (Present bearer)
Release phrase: Be generous
Manifestation: Genzai no kimei takes the form of a bespectacled teenage girl. She has a semi-pale skin and a slim build. She wears a red, black, and blue kimono which are adorned with small white boxes. She’s often very quiet unless in serious situations or if she is talked to. She is also prone to sudden mood-swings.
Inner World: Rei’s inner world takes shape as a stone castle. The castle is small on the outside, but incredibly large on the inside. The insides of the castle are completely empty until something is needed.
Form: When Rei holds the sword and sheathe in his hand and says the release phrase, the dull sound of a bell emanates from the sword and it is swallowed by a myriad of colors. A second later, the sword takes the form of a 39 1/2 inch shirasaya sword and two flexible metal gloves. The sheath of the sword, unlike most sheathes, is actually like the blade and is sharp as one as well. Because Rei holds onto the sheath in battle to fight with, the metal gloves are necessary. The sheathe is about an 1mm thick with 3 square holes in the along it. The actual blade of the sword is 1/2 mm thick and isn’t used to fight with. It is a piercing red color that contrasts with the completely white and purple sheathe.
Armed delivery: At the cost of 1% of his reiatsu, Rei creates a set of boxes. One box is near him while the other box can appear wherever he wishes maxing at 20 meters on ground or air. When Rei sticks his sword in one box, it comes out of another end and then the box vanishes. Just as a present is meant for one target in particular, his sword can only harm those he views as his opponent. Even if he was to target his allies or himself, they would feel only the pain, but they would be totally unharmed. At first, he can only create a single box target, but for each 2000 connection he has, he can create more target areas at a time, capping at 5 target areas per cost.
Delayed delivery: Sometimes Rei wishes for the attacks to strike at a different time than now. By spending the regular cost to create the boxes plus 200 reiatsu, he can make the sword emerge a turn later. The box which the sword appears from doesn’t show up until the turn comes. He can hold up the attack up to three turns later, each turn costing 200 reiatsu. All weapon penalties taken into account according to how many swords he holds back. It doesn’t effect the overall penalties of new sword attacks.
Ability 1:
Hannya (Wisdom, greater consciousness)
"Awaken the mind’s eye”
At the expense of 1% reiatsu, when Igasho makes contact with an opponent or their zanpakutou, either by hand or sword, a third eye appears upon a targets’ forehead as well as the assassin's. The eye can be maintained for the cost of 1% reiatsu per turn, exposing the inner thoughts of the opponent. The engraved eye on the brass pommel-cap and the vertical eye on the target’s forehead will glow an iridescent blue while active.
Ability 2:
Sunyata (Emptiness)
"Drain their suffering and become nothing with existence”
As long as the spirit is released, every time Igasho makes contact (by hand or zanpakutou) with an opponent or their released zanpakutou, the equivalent of 2% of Igasho’s maximum reiatsu is siphoned from the target and into him. As the reiatsu is siphoned, Igasho’s wounds will heal over time but if there are no wounds to heal or if his reiatsu is full, the energy will simply drain from the opponent.
Alright, so I know summon type things are supposed to be relegated to BK and require a specific set-up. Though, for this kai I didn't want a full fledged pay a ton of rei summon. I wanted a more spammable clone spell+ kai.
The way I set up the summoning abilities are pretty much a kai version of: Ningyō Tsukaiken - Bakudou #46, 600 Kidou
Description: Ningyō Tsukaiken creates a perfect imitation of the caster. The caster imbues the clone with enough reiatsu to perform a single potent melee attack before vanishing. Choosing either Hakuda or Zanjutsu (not both), the caster gives their clone striking power equal to half of the chosen stat. The effect lasts for as long as the clone is in play. When zanjutsu is the chosen stat, the caster may supply the clone with a weapon, should the clone not already possess one.
But these would actually stay and could do more than one attack. If this doesn't fly I can change it.
Shikai: Name: Jojishi - “Epic” Release Command: Lucia says one of the following: -Enter Video Game Weapon Here- Equipped!
Level Up!
Do Do Do Dooo Dooo Do Do Do!
Fatality!
The Wheel of Fate is Turning!
I’m Breaking my Limit!
What... Jojishi is Evolving?!
Extra Life!
Use the Boost to Catch Up!
Objection!
Minions have Spawned!
Manifestation:
Same as old kai, I'll C/P later.
Form:
After releasing her zanpaktou, the weapon completely digitizes itself, disappearing from view. Seconds later, a set of four holographic screens appear around Lucia, all showing a variety of information as she uses her abilities. An advanced looking gauntlet appears around her right arm. The gauntlet is completely metallic, and is engulfed in lavender vector lines. A similar looking spaulder appears on her shoulder, as ropes of binary coding link together the spaulder and gauntlet. On her face appears a complex set of goggles, illuminated by the similar set of vector lines.
Ability: Tutorial: Opening the Options Menu
Sometimes, you really need to look at the world through grid-lines. Conflicts can make so much more sense once you start playing with them game style. Upon activating her shikai, Lucia transforms the entirety of the battle-field around her.The environment is transformed to mimic her favorite type of game, tactical role-playing games.
Every turn, Lucia can summon up a manifestation of herself, which is able to have a single combat stat, rage or ability. If ability is the selected that, it’s equal to 50% of Lucia’s kidou. If rage is the choice, then it is equal to 50% of hakuda for combat. The manifestations’ agility is equal to half of her hohou. The physical appearance of each of the manifestations can vary; however, they must be humanoid beings.
If the manifestations specialize in combat, they can be provided a weapon on creation. If the manifestations specialize in ability, Lucia can choose a kidou,chiydou spells included but not kindou, she has equipped for them to be able to cast, as long as their ability stat is high enough to equip the spell and they have enough reiatsu to cast it. The cost to create a manifestation, and subsequently destroy it, is 10% of her reiatsu per manifestation. She can have a maximum of 3 manifestations available at a time.
Ability: Tutorial: Changing the Camera Angle
The manifestations are able to function in a similar fashion as the kidou Surveillance Clone. Therefore, anything that the manifestation senses or sees is instantly routed to Lucia. This allows her to cycle through beings at will, gaining information from each. She can also relay her voice through her summons, allowing the pass messages through them. She can distort her voice through the manifestation, allowing her to select the tenor, tone and pitch. She must pay 1% of her reiatsu, each time she shifts from being to being.
By calling out Bankai, the very space around Lucia, and the battlefield in general warps. The mechanized gauntlet whirs rapidly, as it evolves into its new state. Small metallic circles wrap around the gauntlet, floating just around the weapon. As she uses her abilities, the metallic object whirs loudly, emitting the glow of her reiatsu. Ten different holographic screens appear around Lucia, as the HUDs begin to revolve around her, all displaying a variety of information and, to outsiders, random symbols.
Though, the real change in Bankai is the battlefield itself. In shikai, the effects were masked, as she was unable to summon the entirety of the bond. In Final Release, a set of grid-lattice lines are emitted from her gauntlet, covering the ground with the grid pattern. The boxes are roughly the size of a person, as both she and her enemy stand like units in a video-game.
This futuristic feel permeates into her abilities as well. As such, when she uses kidou or activates technique, they take on a flavorful variation of the normal techniques in this state.
Ability: Advanced Tutorial: Closing the Options Menu
Every turn, Lucia can summon up to two manifestations of herself, each one able to have a single combat stat, rage or ability equal to 75% of Lucia’s kidou for their ability stat. Or 75% of hakuda for combat. The manifestations’ agility is equal to 75% of her hohou. The physical appearance of each of the manifestations can vary; however, they must be humanoid beings. The beings summoned do not release a reiatsu signature.
If the manifestations specialize in combat, they can be provided a weapon on creation. If the manifestations specialize in ability, Lucia can choose up to two kidou, chiydou spells included but not kindou, spells she has equipped for them to be able to cast, as long as their ability stat is high enough to equip the spell and they have enough reiatsu to cast it. The cost to create a manifestation, and subsequently destroy it, is 10% of her reiatsu per manifestation. She can have up to five manifestations at once summoned.
The manifestations are able to function in a similar fashion as the kidou Surveillance Clone. Therefore, anything that the manifestation senses or sees is instantly routed to Lucia. This allows her to cycle through beings at will, gaining information from each. She can also relay her voice through her summons, allowing the pass messages through them. She must pay 1% of her reiatsu, each time she shifts from being to being.
Sometimes, it’s almost like there’s a microchip in the manifestations' heads. But in all reality, there’s the much more plausible customization menu completely ingrained into their psyche. By opening up a customization menu, on one of the screens, while summoning, Lucia can implant the manifestation with the ability to activate one of her own unique feats, division techniques or general techniques. The manifestation must have either a rage stat able to handle the hakuda or zanjustu technique, or an ability stat able to use the kidou related technique or feat and the reiatsu level as well.
Attack: Advanced Tutorial: Saving and Loading Files
The manifestations are expressions of Lucia’s subconscious. As such, they have a constant bond with her and other manifestations. As such, they are able to preform maneuvers that only the closest teams could attempt to pull off. Lucia and a manifestation, or two individual manifestations, can each pay 5% of their reiatsu. This allows them to preform either Bait and Switch or Empathic Block. Only one instance of either technique can be used per turn and can only be used once every other turn
Attack: Advanced Tutorial: Changing Game Disks
Sometimes you just wish that there was a class change button. You know, someway that you could redistribute your stats and equip that technique you always wanted. Fortunately for summons, they do have one. By paying 5% of the manifestation’s reiatsu, it can swap from rage spec to ability spec. Each manifestation can only swap once.
Once the specs are changed, a weapon may be provided if the manifestation did not already have one. New kidou can be equipped for those switching to ability spec. Furthermore, a new technique from "Advanced Tutorial: Installing Downloadable Content" can be chosen if the summon can no longer use the technique.
Release Phrase: Show them what I see and strike fear into their hearts, Kagamiken!
Form: A large great sword with a highly polished and mirrored surface.
Inner World: A house of mirrors made of nothing but sliver surfaces.
Ability: Fated Reflection
Whenever a reiatsu based ability, technique, or feat is used, Suzuka can spend 5% reiatsu to replicate it as long as it doesn't require an unmet prerequisite. The strength of the replication is equal to the 5% paid to create it regardless of if it would become stronger or weaker than the original.
Tod - Resubmit 1) sorry for the wait. Ability two is too strong, duration wise. Start it off at a max of 2 turns, then cap the total (+10,000 connection /turn ) at 3. having to pay 5% of your char's max reiatsu to use things is a brutal, brutal ability, so the duration has to be chopped to compensate. Debuff can be 2, (+1/5k) to 5.
Unholy - Approved with Note:
- Multi weapon rules apply to box use
Cad - Approved - Having to hit people to activate these effects is a good limiter, so, cool.
Hiren - Resubmit Circumventing the summon rules, and then us subsequently saying ok, would be like we staff spitting in the face of everyone who has a summon kai. Just can't do it. So, use the standard summon rules, or, try to appeal through GM review a revision of them. Its a can of worms if it is, but we're kai staff, we can handle it.
Twing - DENIED for making a new page.
Just kidding, you're Approved. Van note: Every time this type of thing has come into the game the user has maxfailed with it. Please step away from history and show us awesome.
Still using the spec point for the 2011 Chasing Shadows summer PM's...
New Kai:
Info:
Tod’s spirit has recovered to the point where it can come together again. It’s much more powerful since Widow Maker and Mist Fox were but fragments sent to guard and deal with the trauma of hurting Tod. The new spirit’s voice and touch is as cold as death.
Manifestation:
The combined spirit is called Grey Man, it is a humanoid creature with pale skin and a ratty brown cloak covers the spirit’s entire body. The only part that he can see on the creature are its hands and from its chin to its upper lip on its face. All of the flesh is shows is a pale, almost deathly, white. The lips are a pale pink color, as if they barely remember they held warmth and color at one point. It’s always dripping blood from it’s fingers and it’s feet leave bloody footprints.
Whenever it does show it’s face it can choose a face of anyone that the soul reaper has seen. Usually though the spirit chooses Tod’s own face. The scar at the boy’s neck is always bleeding on the spirits neck and it usually keeps that mark no matter what face it wears. When it changes faces it lowers the hood of its robe back over it's face for a moment before taking it back off with a new face.
Inner World:
Tod’s inner world shifted the moment his two spirits combined. No longer is simply a swamp with a tree in the middle. Instead there is a house made in the old log cabin style as well as the tree that was Widow Maker protruding from the center of the house. The swamp itself has frozen over, creating loud crunches every time someone walks upon the grass and the part north of the house out the great window in the cabin is a cliff that seems unending.
Spirit Name: Haiiro no Hito (Grey Man, 灰色の人)
Release Command:
Show them the chill of death, Grey Man
Shikai Release Form:
The release is still the same katana with a few small differences. There’s a two inch length difference, it is a little longer than an ordinary katana, giving it a deceptive reach since the length difference is only see-able in close proximity. The blade turns white as snow and the hilt changes into that of a snowflake, the snowflake's design is different every time he releases. The handle of his katana changes from the checkered pattern to a pure black the color of frostbite.
When he releases his shikai the area within fifteen feet of the sword becomes noticeably colder, causing some to shiver the moment they feel the chill.
Shikai Abilities:
Mahi Suru Shimo (Numbing Frost, 麻痺する霜): Tod can cause it to be so cold that people that he cuts with his blade find it hard to fight back. He chooses one of his stats and pays 10% of the stat to lower the same stats of anyone he cuts with his blade for three(3) turns. Every three(3) turns he can choose a new stat and pay the cost to continue or change which stat he lowers. At every 5000 Connection he can increase the turns that affect the opponent by one(1) turn, maxing out at seven(7) turns. The target of this ability loses however much to one stat for how much Tod pays. Tod can only choose to use either Numbing Frost or Mind Numbing frost per cut. He can’t choose both abilities for one cut.
Tsumaranai Shimo (Mind Numbing Frost, つまらない霜): Tod can cause it to be so cold that people that he cuts with his blade find it hard to think. Every three(3) turns Tod can pay 5% of his reiatsu to make it more difficult for an opponent from using techs or spells for two(2) turns. The opponent must spend extra rei to use their spells or techs equal to whatever cost Tod payed. At every 5000 Connection he can increase the cost of this ability by 1% maxing out at 5%. At 10000 Connection he can increase the turns this ability affects by one(1) turn maxing out at three(3) turns. Tod can only choose to use either Mind Numbing Frost or Numbing frost per cut. He can’t choose both abilities for one cut.
OK so might as well as get ball rolling with this bad boy. Suggestions on kai names and ability names would totally be appreciated... PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!1111!!!!!!!111111111
ps using spec point from the tourney.
Shikai:
Release Phrase: Unknown
Form:
At first, this release takes the form of a dark katana, barely different than that of her unreleased zanpakutou. The first noticeable difference is a minor increase in width of the blade. This change is purely a precursor to the strength behind the abilities of this release, as well as representing the changes that come with her final release. The other noticeable difference is that the blade of the release becomes jet black, much like the wakizashi she wields that was once the zanpakutou of her brother.
Ability:
The increased width of the blade while released has a meaning that isn’t directly noticeable at first, but become apparent at first whenever Amaya uses the releases innate ability. The increase of width in the blade is due to thousands of tiny fractures that split the blade apart ever so slightly. Due to this, by paying 250 reiatsu, the blade instantly dissolves and turns into a black wispy cloud. This cloud is composed of countless shards of her zanpakutou and severely irritates skin that it comes into contact with. These shards are the essence of this release, too tiny to cut skin, but if breathed in, or filtered into open cuts on the body they can severely damage internal tissue that doesn’t have the inherent strength of skin.
Amaya is able to control the cloud at all times with her mind despite a lack of contact, and the speed and precision of this control is based off her zanjutsu stat. However the form of her release cannot be in this state for more than a single turn, she must revert it back to a solid object at the end of one turn. This object can take the form of any weapon she chooses, but it must be identical in the mass of the blade. It should also be mentioned that despite the fact that the cloud can only be maintained a single turn, there is no minimum turn requirement and can be shifted back into a hardened state in the blink of an eye.
Ability:
The very essence of the release itself is to give Amaya to overcome the adversity that holds her back. While in the release Amaya’s senses are heightened, and it gives her a chance to prove her true strength of swordsmanship. While in the release Amaya's zanjutsu stat is increased by 10% to reflect this heightened strength benefited to her.
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Bankai:
Form:
Upon entering bankai, Amaya’s release initially appears very similar to her initial one. In one hand she holds a nearly identical Katana to that of her initial release, and in the other she holds the Wakizashi of her brother. It takes a single moment, however, to notice the wisps radiating from the Katana she holds, and then it becomes apparent that the air around Amaya is become increasingly filled with the wisps of black looking smoke. After about 10 seconds the air around her, and those close to her are filled with the wisps.
Upon their full release the wisps expand outward nearly 40 yards, becoming the full essence of her fully released zanpakutou. These wisps are identical to the kind found in her initial release, and are composed of tiny iterating shard of her zanpakutou.
Ability:
Much like in her initial release Amaya finds strength while wielding this release. Her heightened senses, and overall increase of strength is represented by a 45% increase to her zanjutsu stat while in this release. This increase is the innate spirit of swordsmanship housed in the woman’s essence, and allows her fight at levels far beyond her unreleased potential.
Ability:
The innate essence of Amaya’s final release is the wisps and clouds that float around her at her control. She can control their movements, making thick layers of fog, making it difficult to see, and she can focus the clouds to increase the irritation to those she’s in combat with. Her control of the movements is based on her zanjutsu stat. Additionally she can condense the clouds around her body into solid objects. These objects are made of the very metal that comprises of her zanpakutou, as the tiny shards of her zanpakutou are what the clouds are comprised of. By paying 5% of her reiatsu, she is able to create or or destroy any form she desires. These forms maintain their shape until Amaya wishes them apart, or until her zanpakutou is resealed.
Additionally, much like in her initial releases Amaya can break down and recreate the actual katana of her zanpakutou. This costs 250 reiatsu, and the form she recreates may not be larger than the initial size of the katana.
Attack:
By forcing her reiatsu into a given area of the wisps Amaya is able to consolidate the shards large enough to take shape, even without touching them. This requires 5% of her reaitsu a turn to maintain, and she can only generate an area of shards approximately equal to the size of her body. These shards become roughly the size and shape of a sewing needle, and Amaya’s control of them. Her control of these shards, much like her control of the wisps is based on her zanjutsu stat.
Attack:
The clouds that Amaya generate are incredibly dangerous to anyone except Amaya who lie within. The essence of the cloud is tiny shards of metal that constantly erode anyone standing within the cloud.
At first, after spending a round in the cloud a victim will feel an unpleasant itching sensation. After three rounds of being withing the cloud, their eyes will be irritated, and it will become increasingly difficult to see. Additionally the victim will develop a harsh sounding cough, as the lining of their throat starts to wear down. After eight rounds the users eyes and skin will become so irritated that they barely keep their eyes open and the skin discomfort will become more than discomfort and sores will start to open, bringing with them into a painful state of agony. At this point, the coughing will grow into a nearly uncontrollable state, and the pain experienced will be terrible. Should the combat last more than eleven turns the discomfort becomes debilitating, and anyone fighting would be extremely crippled.
By paying 15% of her reiatsu Amaya can force the clouds around her to move at massive speeds. While this, like the inherent nature of the cloud doesn’t wound the victim, it does however wear down their resilience. Speeding up the debilitating effects of the shards. If Amaya uses this ability, it is as though she has added two turns that the user has withstood in the cloud. However, due to the strain this ability causes, she may not use this ability in consecutive turns.
Kay, so after GMing and using the guidelines from that, I submit to you clone kai v2.0. In the GM review, it's compared to the kidou clone spells and the properties of the spells... so...
They can only attack once.
- Will says it's possible to remove one limitation, so this one is the one I'm choosing.
For each spell prepared, you only have one way to use it.
-Lucia can either summon a kidou clone or a combat clone. Kidou clones pretty much have one attack and instantly evaporate. Combat clones get to stand around a bit, but after the time limit they're gone and they can only use fisticuff fighting.
They take at least a few seconds to summon one.
- Lucia has a charge time, so theoretically she could be interrupted in the middle of it. They have a small fraction of your own capability.
- They have 50% of a stat, similar to the Ningyo tsukaiken. Their hohou is only as good as regular clones and they're polarized to one stat. They can only really be attacked once.
- At 3%, they're only going to be about 1.5Kish in strength. Most people at this rei level can slash them down with a sword attack or two or melt them with a magical blast of death.
*throws gauntlet*
Shikai: Name: Jojishi - "Epic” Release Command: Lucia says one of the following: -Enter Video Game Weapon Here- Equipped! Level Up! Do Do Do Dooo Dooo Do Do Doooo! The Wheel of Fate is Turning! I’m Breaking my Limit! What... Jojishi is Evolving?! Extra Life! Use the Boost to Catch Up! Objection! FUS ROH DAH! FINAL SMASH! Pentakill! Manifestation: Form: After releasing her zanpaktou, the weapon completely digitizes itself, disappearing from view. Seconds later, a set of four holographic screens appear around Lucia, all showing a variety of information as she uses her abilities. An advanced looking gauntlet appears around her right arm. The gauntlet is completely metallic, and is engulfed in lavender vector lines. A similar looking spaulder appears on her shoulder, as ropes of binary coding link together the spaulder and gauntlet. On her face appears a complex set of goggles, illuminated by the similar set of vector lines.
Ability: Tutorial: Opening the Options Menu
Sometimes, you really need to look at the world through grid-lines. Conflicts can make so much more sense once you start playing with them game style. Upon activating her shikai, Lucia transforms the entirety of the battle-field around her.The environment is transformed to mimic her favorite type of game, tactical role-playing games.
Every turn, Lucia can expend 3% of her reiatsu to summon a single manifestation per turn. The physical appearance of the manifestation can change, but they must be humanoid in shape. The clone can either focus in combat or kidou. If a clone focuses on kidou, they are equipped with one kidou spell Lucia has equipped. When summoning this clone, Lucia must pay the cost of the kidou along with the normal summoning cost.
The clone can activate the kidou, while at the same time sacrificing it self in the process if it is an instantaneous spell. If the kidou is channeled over a set number of rounds, the manifestation remains; however, it can no longer preform any actions, other than "Tutorial: Changing the Camera Angle”.
If a manifestation specializes in combat, they gain a combat stat equal to 50% of Lucia’s hakuda. They can be provided a weapon when summoned. If the clones are in direct combat, they remain on the field for a maximum of 3 turns. If the clones are not in combat, for example acting simply as a decoy, they can remain on the field indefinitely until they enter combat.
When summoning a manifestation, perhaps due to the poorly constructed HUDs, Lucia requires a short charge time where she focuses her reiatsu into the form her thoughts created.
Ability: Tutorial: Changing the Camera Angle
The manifestations are able to function in a similar fashion as the kidou Surveillance Clone. Therefore, anything that the manifestation senses or sees is instantly routed to Lucia. This allows her to cycle through beings at will, gaining information from each. She can also relay her voice through her summons, allowing the pass messages through them. She can distort her voice through the manifestation, allowing her to select the tenor, tone and pitch. She must pay 1% of her reiatsu, each time she shifts from being to being.
Bankai Name: Jikou Jojishi - Artificial Epic Form: By calling out Bankai, the very space around Lucia, and the battlefield in general warps. The mechanized gauntlet whirs rapidly, as it evolves into its new state. Small metallic circles wrap around the gauntlet, floating just around the weapon. As she uses her abilities, the metallic object whirs loudly, emitting the glow of her reiatsu. Ten different holographic screens appear around Lucia, as the HUDs begin to revolve around her, all displaying a variety of information and, to outsiders, random symbols.
Though, the real change in Bankai is the battlefield itself. In shikai, the effects were masked, as she was unable to summon the entirety of the bond. In Final Release, a set of grid-lattice lines are emitted from her gauntlet, covering the ground with the grid pattern. The boxes are roughly the size of a person, as both she and her enemy stand like units in a video-game.
This futuristic feel permeates into her abilities as well. As such, when she uses kidou or activates techniqfue, they take on a flavorful variation of the normal techniques in this state.
Ability: Advanced Tutorial: Closing the Options Menu
In Bankai, everything really does make more sense when you look at it through grid-lines. Her skill over summoning has manifested itself to the pinnacle point. This allows her to not only to summon more long lasting summons, but more than one at a time.
Every turn, Lucia can expend 3% of her reiatsu to summon up to two manifestations per turn. The physical appearance of the manifestation can change, but they must be humanoid in shape. The clone can either focus in combat or kidou. If a clone focuses on kidou, they are equipped with one kidou spell Lucia has equipped. When summoning this type of clone, Lucia must pay the cost of the kidou spell she selects along with the summoning cost.
The clone can activate the kidou, while at the same time sacrificing it self in the process if it is an instantaneous spell. If the kidou is channeled over a set number of rounds, the manifestation remains; however, it can no longer preform any actions, other than "Tutorial: Changing Game Disks”.
If a manifestation specializes in combat, they gain a combat stat equal to 50% of Lucia’s hakuda. They can be provided a weapon when summoned. If the clones are in direct combat, they remain on the field for a maximum of 4 turns. If the clones are not in combat, for example acting simply as a decoy, they can remain on the field indefinitely until they enter combat.
When summoning a manifestation, perhaps due to the poorly constructed HUDs, Lucia requires a short charge time where she focuses her reiatsu into the form her thoughts created.
Sometimes, it’s almost like there’s a microchip in the manifestations heads. But in all reality, there’s the much more plausible customization menu completely ingrained into their psyche. By opening up a customization menu, on one of the screens, while summoning, Lucia can implant the manifestation with the ability to activate one of her own division techniques, race techniques or general techniques, as long as they have the reiatsu level for it. They are unable to use a race technique that has a stat, other than reiatsu, requirement.
Attack: Advanced Tutorial: Saving and Loading Files
The manifestations are expressions of Lucia’s subconscious. As such, they have a constant bond with her and other manifestations. As such, they are able to preform maneuvers that only the closest teams could attempt to pull off. By paying 5% of her reiatsu and sacrificing the manifestation she chooses, she is able to preform a technique. This allows them to preform either Bait and Switch or Empathic Block. Only one instance of either technique can be used per turn and can only be used once every other turn.
Attack: Advanced Tutorial: Changing Game Disks
The manifestations are able to function in a similar fashion as the kidou Surveillance Clone. Therefore, anything that the manifestation senses or sees is instantly routed to Lucia. This allows her to cycle through beings at will, gaining information from each. She can also relay her voice through her summons, allowing the pass messages through them. She can distort her voice through the manifestation, allowing her to select the tenor, tone and pitch. She must pay 1% of her reiatsu, each time she shifts from being to being. In Bankai, when switching to a manifestation, Lucia can reshape the appearance of the clone, using a full turn to complete the act.
Using my Spec point from Chasing Shadows PMs to change this... lets try this dance one more time XD
New Kai:
Info:
Tod’s spirit has recovered to the point where it can come together again. It’s much more powerful since Widow Maker and Mist Fox were but fragments sent to guard and deal with the trauma of hurting Tod. The new spirit’s voice and touch is as cold as death.
Manifestation:
The combined spirit is called Grey Man, it is a humanoid creature with pale skin and a ratty brown cloak covers the spirit’s entire body. The only part that he can see on the creature are its hands and from its chin to its upper lip on its face. All of the flesh is shows is a pale, almost deathly, white. The lips are a pale pink color, as if they barely remember they held warmth and color at one point. It’s always dripping blood from it’s fingers and it’s feet leave bloody footprints.
Whenever it does show it’s face it can choose a face of anyone that the soul reaper has seen. Usually though the spirit chooses Tod’s own face. The scar at the boy’s neck is always bleeding on the spirits neck and it usually keeps that mark no matter what face it wears. When it changes faces it lowers the hood of its robe back over it's face for a moment before taking it back off with a new face.
Inner World:
Tod’s inner world shifted the moment his two spirits combined. No longer is simply a swamp with a tree in the middle. Instead there is a house made in the old log cabin style as well as the tree that was Widow Maker protruding from the center of the house. The swamp itself has frozen over, creating loud crunches every time someone walks upon the grass and the part north of the house out the great window in the cabin is a cliff that seems unending.
Spirit Name: Haiiro no Hito (Grey Man, 灰色の人)
Release Command:
Show them the chill of death, Grey Man
Shikai Release Form:
The release is still the same katana with a few small differences. There’s a two inch length difference, it is a little longer than an ordinary katana, giving it a deceptive reach since the length difference is only see-able in close proximity. The blade turns white as snow and the hilt changes into that of a snowflake, the snowflake's design is different every time he releases. The handle of his katana changes from the checkered pattern to a pure black the color of frostbite.
When he releases his shikai the area within fifteen feet of the sword becomes noticeably colder, causing some to shiver the moment they feel the chill.
Shikai Abilities:
Koori no Mikaduki (Ice Crescents, 氷の三日月): Tod creates a crescent of Ice from his blade slash, much like his previous shikai. However now he doesn’t need to store up moisture since he can use ambient moisture. The ability costs 3% of his rei to use and at every 3500 rei he can create another crescent to attack with right behind the first one maxing out at 5 crescents total. Each extra crescent created this way costs an additional 1% rei.
Touketsu Suru Sekai (Frozen World, 凍結する世界) Tapping into his spirits’ nature Tod can actually freeze the world around him. He sets up a trap by stabbing the ground and freezes the ground within a five foot radius of where the sword stabbed. The power even freezes up an inch. This power costs 3% of Tod’s rei to use. At every 2500 rei he can freeze an extra inch upwards, maxing out at 10 inches, for an extra 1% rei cost per inch.
I'm going to use one of my spec points to get this kai..
Shikai
Name: Suiboku no shoujo (Girl of Ink)
Release phrase: Let the words flow
Manifestation: Suiboku no shoujo takes the form of a bespectacled teenage girl. She has a semi-pale skin and a slim build. She wears a red, black, and blue kimono which are adorned with small white boxes. Always with her is a sketchbook on which she practices her Calligraphy. She’s often very quiet unless in serious situations or if she is talked to.
Inner World: Rei’s inner world takes shape as a giant drawing of plains and rivers. The drawings change according to his moods. The one thing that always remains the same is the sound of bells lingering within
Form: When Rei holds the sword and sheathe in his hand and says the release phrase, the dull sound of a bell emanates from the sword and it is swallowed by a myriad of colors. A second later, the sword takes the form of a 39 1/2 inch shirasaya sword and two flexible metal gloves. The sheath of the sword, unlike most sheathes, is actually like the blade and is sharp as one as well. Because Rei holds onto the sheath in battle to fight with, the metal gloves are necessary. The sheathe is about an 1mm thick with 3 square holes in the along it. The actual blade of the sword is 1/2 mm thick and isn’t used to fight with. It is a piercing red color that contrasts with the completely white and purple sheathe.
Ability 1: Henkou no tango (Words of Change: Solid Form) - Rei has the ability to manipulate his sword in numerous ways by commanding it to change. It has two forms. The solid form and the liquid form. First, Rei must charge from 1% up to 10% of his reiatsu in his sword. Afterwords while in solid form, he can say words aloud to change his sword, like extend, bend, curve, etc. He can also change the blade into inorganic non-moving items. The range for the changes is 20 meters. Whenever a command is issued, half of the energy stored within the sword is used. For every 3000 connection his has though he can say an additional word before the power halves, capping at 4. The power remains within the sword for four turns and when the time limit has been reached, the current energy within the sword halves again and returns to Rei. Word to change from Solid to Liquid form is Flow.
Ability 2: Henkou no tango (Words of Change: Liquid Form) - In liquid form, he can control the movement with his mind and isn’t as limited in movement in its solid form. Its range is 20 meters. Anything it touches isn’t harmed but is stained with an ink like substance that stains anything. When his victims are stained with the ink, he can say attack words and the enemy would be afflicted with damage with great accuracy on the areas on the enemies body where the ink was and depending on what was said the type of damage that would be inflicted. If the ink is splattered on the ground or on inorganic materials, he can influence the material the ink touches with his words like with his sword in solid form. Just like with the sword in its solid form, whenever a command is issued, half of the energy stored within the sword is used. For every 3000 connection his has though he can say an additional word before the power halves, capping at 4. However when an "attack” word is used it halves every time regardless After an "action word” has taken place, the ink that was on the opponent attacked disappears. The word to change from liquid to solid is harden.
To spare van the pain I’ll be doing this solo since I’m pretty sure we’d reach the same decision regardless. Denied. A kai containing either of these abilities would still be too OP to be passed let alone both so we’ll go for reason each individual part will never be approved~
Ability 1: Pick a static cost no variables for the sword charge, your range of change will 5m, Energy used also needs to be static, we’re getting rid of connection. You will not get power back after the 4 turns.
Ability 2: Byakuya rip off is pretty blatant but w/e it’s the least annoying thing in this kai, range would also be 5m. No auto hits, ever so the next sentence is completely gone. Energy used also needs to be static, we’re getting rid of connection. You will not get power back after the 4 turns.
True Awakening Sub for my character Darius Vahanian
Paroxysmal Descender
Paroxysmal Descender manifests as mystical symbols on Darius’ body, making Darius a conductor for the energy inherent in light. The symbols appear whenever Darius is invoking his ability as a conductor of that gathered energy. At will, anything that touches Darius’ directly will receive his imparted energy and explode at his subconscious command. Explosions cannot be made directly using beings with their own reiatsu.
Attack: Darius can create smaller explosions for 1% of his reiatsu
Attack: Darius will imbue an object with 15% of his reiatsu into an object giving it force-related explosive properties.
Attack: Darius focuses his explosion power to deliver an chemically induced cloud. The cloud itself contains reiatsu created poison that holds acidic properties. The acidic cloud can break down inanimate objects fairly easily but living and spiritual beings will feel a moderate chemical burn from the cloud. The thick cloud costs 1% of Darius’ reiatsu per 1m up to 10% of his total reiatsu.
Notes considered while reviewing: I am submitting two feats specifically designed to power up this kai, it'll probably more concern feat staff but feat 1 allows Darius to "move" the explosive energy he's charging into an object to other objects up to 15 m away and feat 2 allows him to double the costs in order to double the effect of an attack. I think everything's in line so just let me knw if you have any feedback/thoughts. Thanks Release and Feat staff!
Edit: For some reason I JUST realized that this plus my feats makes me Kimblee. FMA is cool, I guess, but I totally didn't realize my copy cat idea for bomb kai u_u
