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I actually do have the next part of Keydis' story halfway written, but I would rather not split that one in half. As such, you get another snippet from Firmament. I think it came out more exposition-heavy than I would have liked, definitely need to fix that up later. Chapter 02: The Raven Comes...

I definitely need to spend a little more effort introducing the island. At this point I'm still just sort of slapping ideas together to see what sticks. Ironically, I think I've spent the most time developing my concept of a magical system and the past several centuries of history that formed...

Testing a new Add-on for linking threads as Chapters. First, create a new thread. Preferred to do so in the Compiled Works forum, but it's active everywhere. In the upper right, you should see a new button for "Manage Chapters" where you can add a Thread or a Post and give it a title. You can...

This is an excerpt from a novel I've been working on, still in a very rough state. I normally wouldn't consider this ready to share, but I set a goal of posting at least 1000 words per week, and I don't know if I'll be able to push past my current slump before tonight. It's completely unrelated...

Hey everyone, I'm posting this mainly for my own benefit, in an attempt to hold myself accountable. It's difficult to describe, but I feel like the past year, year-and-a-half, I've almost been in the writing equivalent of physical therapy. It's been small steps, but I had to start with...

"Everybody is a book of blood; wherever we’re opened, we’re red." - Clive Barker, “Books of Blood: Volumes One to Three” In writing, we share part of ourselves with the readers, impart the emotions hidden deep within. Emotions and fears. We all of us hold fear and horror inside, the terror of a...

The imagery of a puppet was woven into this chapter masterfully. One thing I think would improve it, though, is to not state it openly. The visual impact of Mercuti being lax and then coming to attention, together with the Outside One in the background, does enough to sell the idea without...

Although this comes really late in the story, I appreciate getting this humanizing moment with the Seven Devils. In a way, it's more poetic this way, like sating some of the rage inside her is what allowed these memories of a brighter time slip in. Very nicely done both in tone and imagery...

Very dark, very intense. After all Micali has been through, I feel like her choices make perfect sense here. Even killing Corruma feels deserved because even though she knew everything that had happened, she still tried to talk Micali out of killing Cid. Not because it would benefit Micali or...

Six months down the line, and finally I catch up to this. Because of the long gap, I wanted to refresh my memory on some of the details by reading the previous chapters. It's good to get back into Micali's story. A very emotionally damaging story, of course. This chapter was all about the inner...

Converting Google Drive Formats (.gdoc, .gsheet) to Office Formats (.docx, .xlsx) As the title says. Many of us got in the habit of using Google Docs for the ease of collaboration, and have years' worth of content sitting on GDrive. Google does offer an option to download everything (Google...

I'm not sure if I read this out of order (I did the collabs first), but I have to say again that your portrayal of Lea's trauma is quite visceral. I may not have had that same degree of it, but it's relatable in a way that makes it uncomfortable. His distrust of others and the friendly mask...

Before I had a chance to post these, this popped up. I'd say it's good timing, since it allows me to go into the story with my previous critique in mind. I'm going to use one of your early descriptions as an example. This, I would say, is about halfway there, but it still reads like you're...

Two 20k stories barely a month apart. As someone who has barely written a tenth of that recently, take my thoughts with a grain of salt! This is more what I expect from you: the unexpected. This whole scenario had the vibe of Cthulhu Mythos style mystery and horror. There was a sprinkling of...

This really didn't grab me. Blame it on me holding you on a pedestal, but I typically expect really unique, quirky ideas or new takes on classic themes. However, while there was one twist near the end, it didn't feel like it was set up appropriately for a strong payoff. It also felt like... you...

Very sad to see Craxtus go. He's been with us basically from the start. The somber imagery and the ways each character carries their grief (or their anger) really helps draw out emotion. The question of who and how teases at new intrigue and while they may not be immediately connected, I wonder...

What I mentioned about Aeria's speaking style becomes a little more apparent when Aeria and Laermont are side by side. I really liked how Lea and Laermont both got deeply interested in each other, two enigmas trying to crack their own mysteries through the lens of the other. I will note that...

I hate to be so brief when it's been so long before giving feedback, but there's not a lot to say. I enjoyed this, and Inks, you do a great job playing the two sides of Lea's trauma, the internal and the external. The way he frets over the halberd is particularly well-played, and especially the...

I like the way this both covers the time gap and invites change by bringing in the new quaestor prime. I like Lucullus' character so far, as well. I'm not so sure about that title, though. I would recommend introducing a new rank title instead. In our normal police forces, you would have a...

I won't keep harping on the name of the organization, but one thing I am beginning to feel more and more with the organization is that lack of nuance. It's difficult to picture how this particular group can see themselves as righteous, and that makes their delusional behavior hard to understand...